by Defluer
Nearly perfect. A few small grammar things, but now I don’t remember where, or care.
Super hot!
It was decent until the last paragraph where you ruined it. Why would you have them cheat on each other? By doing that you're admitting that the relationship is purely sexual in nature with no deeper feelings involved.
Very hot at first when he forced his sister on the table - I got confused in places at what was happening after mom joined in. Still, it was a sexy concept and generally well done. Thank you!
The sex is sizzling hot, very well composed and described. The story, far fetched as it might be, has a lot more credibility to it than most incest stories. Definitely one of the best I ever read. 5 stars!
Nice story. Needs a bit of proof reading to fix little errors, and smooth out parts that didn't make sense.
Wow, got me going! Just read one of your early offerings, and you've come a long way in your writing. Not perfect but very readable. Your plots are super, not necessarily totally believable, but very entertaining. Please keep writing and I'll definitely keep reading. Thanks, AJ
Why get the mother involved? Wouldn't have wasted my time if it was going to turn into a threesome between bro, sis, mother. One star.
Good premise.
But sex happens much to quickly, and proceeds too quickly.
Needed more in the way of preliminaries.
Needed her noticing his hard cock in his pants and asking, "Is that because of me?"
Needed to slow down.
Foir stars.