All Comments on 'Shedding Spite'

I like the threads of your stories but exchanging the names of the players is confusing and having the MC in the first person and then in the third person in the same sentence is off putting. 2 Op Banners and an extended tour at MPH mean I can relate to Overwatch and I enjoyed Jack and Diane. Get an editor, there are a lot of volunteers on Literotica and keep up the good work.

Pretty good, but the ex got off scott free

I actually didn't understand any of the story except the divorce part because the wife was a slut.

Very well done! Worth every bit of 5 BIG STARS!

Nice story but as an American I didn't understand one word about the games. Pitch? like in throw???

Liked it

Rugby is it

Thanks to the almighty for all small favors; TK U MLJ LV NV

So I can't give you a full five stars.

must get their training when they're little girls!! "Where will I live?" is the kind of question they should have learnt then! It shows no repentence whatsoever! Maybe he shouldn't have hurt Reilly too much, but as for the last guy he deserved it for cheating. As far as I understand, both of them knew his reputation so why the hell did they think of tangling with him?

It's good but the ending stank. Ya know gud buddi iffn ye got ye head on straight a more decent close would happen. But then why force the issue?

As others have said the story was going along nicely then suddenly it stopped. Anyway good to see you back writing.

Keep it coming and seriously think about "proper endings" to stories of JPB's like "Carymen's baby". Well done!

But I think the story is still open. Another chapter should answer all the questions. It was a good story, but still needs some fine cutting. Thank you for the story.

It was enjoyable, but a bit uneven. The question of two affairs at the same time would be worth explaining. Maybe another story from the ex-wife's point of view?

Thanks.

... who wrote the comment below entitled "I wonder." The story starts out well, but then kind of fizzles out. Why indeed was the wife cheating with not one but two different men? All kinds of questions remain unanswered, and to just have her drift away mysteriously is a cop out. If the main character isn't interested in even the most basic facts about the adultery that ended his marriage, why should the reader care about the story at all?

Enjoyed this and identified with quite a lot of it actually. Maybe that's the way wing forwards are.

Long time since I heard anyone saying 'squiring' (Have I spelt that right?), but it was certainly a term in frequent use back in the years when I was free to do so myself.

Thanks for the story.

Well written, but honestly, just like your "Jack and Diane" story, a fine beginning, a good development, only to have an ending that just kind of fizzled. OK, OK, he's learned a lesson not to be spiteful and vindictive. Ho-Hum. He lives happily ever after. Yeah, yeah. <br><P>

But there aren't any answers. Had his wife always been a slut, and he just didn't know? Or had something specific happened that caused her to start, not one, but two affairs? Having her sell the house and disappear is easy and convenient, but doesn't provide the feeling of finality. Are there supposed to be more chapters? <br><P>

Again, this story, like 'Jack and Diane', left me feeling that TTB just got tired of the story before it was done!

concise

Well written, enjoyed it, Thanks.