All Comments on 'Shelter Pet Pt. 01'

Flaming lips? Only reason for kitties name i can think of.

Good start, with holding my overall opinion till the story is continued.

Thanks.

I love it! Mandy and Brianna’s relationship seems so genuine that I want to see more of them. Also I want to see what is involved with pet play from a writers perspective

There seems 2 be more affection in this dom/sub relationship than others ive read so far any way. Keep it up please.

This has the makings of a sexy story and i love your style of writting.

Yes, we have a winner! Yoshimi gets her name from the Flaming Lips song entitled "Yoshimi Battles the Pink Robots"

Coming on nicely WP. The trick is not to go mad with unattributed dialogue to the extent that the reader loses the threads. This might seem obvious but I have occasionally read books by highly-regarded professional writers who have made this mistake. You're good at creating characters with strange hobbies (although they might think me equally strange---"An elderly straight man who writes lesbian stories? Must be a weirdo!"). Looking forward to see how this develops.

I've never heard of kitten play and I thought it was really original. Light-hearted sexy fun! I'll definitely read future chapters. I also felt your writing style was easy to follow and clear. Great job!

Shelter Pet Part 2 is in the queue and will be out soon. Usually about a week, though sometimes faster.

Thanks for all the positive feedback on the story so far.

-WP-

I was not going to read this story, I do not read any story with the word pet in it, but I started reading it anyway, and it started out good but by page 2 I had skipped most of it and I think part 2, I will skip that, you said at the start of this story that there would be loving and kindness, but I only read that with the kitten and not the 2 girls, I do like they way you care for cats

... but you've given us barely an introduction to what could turn out to be a very interesting pet play story.

So... Get to it, Give us more!

This is building into a great story, i like the abbreviated style. Actually i perfer it, i tend to draw a mental image almost immediately and hate when the next paragraph debunks my stylised view.

Moving on to Chapter 2

See you on the other side.