by ukfunguy
It is not that the story is well told,but it does inspire thoughts around the centre.
I don't usually go for father/daughter stories, but somehow this was different. It had me hard the whole way through. Chapter 2 will be an absolute MUST for me to read.
Sure there were mistakes, but I for one would love to reaed what happens next!
Loved the story, and hope you write the the next chapter!
was unfortunately flawed with many mistakes and made me keep stopping, so it spoiled the momentum. It could have been a great story, you had the plot but didn't execute it well enough. Try reading your story over 3 times before submitting so that you can pick up on the tiny mistakes. Or have someone help with the editing. Without the obvious mistakes it would have been so much better.
brilliant story!! love all the sexy daughters in stockings stories, when is the next one!!
very good story, loved the action in it....however, you need to find someone to proof read your stories, it was kind of hard to keep up with.