All Comments on 'Siblings with Benefits'

Loved the buildup and the chain of events...not too fast, but definitely a hot progression!

Great all the way around.

with tuna and onions ?!? I'm confused. Please help me understand.

Honestly incredible, couldn't have asked for more!

You put together a very hot story (I gave you a "5,"btw), and someone questions your pizza toppings? Amazing where some people place their priorities!

This story was hot, but it felt like you were running out of normal words and looked up synonyms online. Why not say "frozen" instead of "ossified" or "mouth" instead of "oral cavity"? They were weird choices and kind of threw off the flow of your story.

Very nice I rarely give 5 stars but that was great!

nicely done

This story was well written and held my interest. I had the feeling that English wasn't your first language and that some of choices of words weren't from trying to be different by using a Thesaurus, but rather evidence of you being of a different culture. Whatever the reason, I enjoyed your story very much. Thank you for sharing it.

I really can't understand people complimenting this awful ESL garbage.

Not your fault that English isn't your first language, but don't attempt writing in it if it means phrases such as "making me elude from the pressure" or "Why don't you put down your ominous face..." This reads like bad Russian/English translation from the days of the Cold War!

"He unhurriedly said the three of them should follow him to his office. Damn, you should have seen those baffled faces." Seriously!!!

Anal sibling stories are my fave keep up the good work

Nice work up to their shared passion.

I'd figured from your writing that your native language is a Germanic one other than English ('turned my ankle' rather than 'twisted'; 'let's refresh' instead of 'freshen up') and your biography confirmed it. The story itself is OK, more than OK even, but you should perhaps try and use simpler English. Simpler is not worse. Some of the most celebrated English-language authors wrote in a style that a six year old could understand.

It's a perfectly good phrase in British English

Just amazing

Very hot and well written