All Comments on 'Simon Says'

fyi its "truce", not "truths". otherwise very suspenseful and fun!

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Loved it!

It's a "truce," not a "truths." Good story, though.

Changes in tense from present to past and sentence fragments and run-on sentence structures ruined an otherwise decent story.

I liked everything but the ending.

Way to predictable.....

Echoing the tense change comment. Always, always, always, write stories in past tense, unless you have a very specific reason (and you're absolutely sure it's a good reason) for doing otherwise.

I'm hoping to read at least one more chapter....

Grat story have the be to his mother and get a family threesome next.

9 inches is super cringe