by Vinny Smith
A warning at the start that the story is a bit dark would have been appreciated
Maybe let people know this is a snuff and horror story? Wrong section, dude.
Also, I don't know what strip clubs you've worked in, lmao. Maybe a dingy shithole in the middle of nowhere would do something like this (killing people), but not even the shitholes near Mexico are like that. I would know: I used to dance in them. Not realistic in the least.
man, you suck, and you're sick - but not even in a good way - put your rambling rubbish in the 'horror' section please, so we don't get distracted from the good stuff.
It would have been erotic if she went down on him and became his whore.
The end was a boner killer.
I don't find it at all erotic. Rather nasty, in the real sense of the word. Interesting that the women in your stories finish up dead because of their looks. A little enraged, are we?
You are one warped dude to think this is enjoyable or erotic. This is more of a horror story. Find a different website for your painful musings.
This story had some potential. But you went way off of the deep end with the biting of the cock then having them both dead at the end.
Don't give up...just maybe not so much drama next time..
Give me a fucking break dude. Do you really think someone would get turned on by this? What fucking publisher let this shit through?
This story isn't erotic... maybe scary or bizarre... but not erotic and not very good.
This story gives new meaning to the 'erotica' in 'literotica.'