All Comments on 'Sipping on Fire Ch. 01'

You did a very good job in this of introducing and describing the world. It's a rare talent to be able to explain magic succinctly, and you did it well.

That said, get a volunteer editor to help you out with little blips (missing punctuation, words out of order, etc). When a story draws a reader in this quickly, you don't want small errors to yank them out.

I hope you choose to continue this. You can count me in for the ride if you do.

Cheers~

Tux

I would appreciate any comments guys. Feel free to point out any errors, inconsistencies and plot holes. Thank you!

Little spots of errors... nothing a little editing can't fix. They weren't enough to distract me from the story. I hope you continue submitting. I enjoyed this

I also hope you continue. Great star. You seamlessly built a world with different rules without it reading like a dry how- to manual.

Hope you feel encouraged enough to continue. I will definitely read

I loved how you told the story and also how you incorporated the explaination of the world the characters live in without it being dry and boring.

Some ideas I found funny like the "fight or fuck" idea 😂😂😂

Please do continue because the idea for the story is fresh and the world they live in is intresting and Fascination !!!!

Very well done. Most enjoyable. Please continue.