All Comments on 'Sister/Genie Ch. 04'

I was disappointed with this installment on several levels. I'm not happy about Jaya being in trouble and on the run as it were. I would have enjoyed it more if the story had turned in a different direction.

I also have a problem with your time-line. 🙄 Jaya is in her office and the boom is about to be lowered, so she wishes herself to the safety of her home. She isn't there even an hour and suddenly the police are serving her a warrant at her home? Realistically speaking, there's no freaking way that could have been put together in less than a full day much less than an hour.

Fiction or not, you can only expect your readers to suspend their beliefs so far. 😉 And what was the purpose for Jaya and the Genie to flash their tits to the wolves in the bar? Those arrogant pricks don't deserve to be given the time of day much less anything sexy. The one with the girlfriend at home who expressed a desire to remain faithful was the only decent man in the crowd.

I was leaning towards knocking this one all the way down to a three. But I decided to be generous with 4/5 instead.

Okay, Jaya's ridiculous behavior has been LARGELY due to not being able to accept Magic, ... alright, ... but she wasn't scientific or logical enough to try and learn about it (safely). I think that this sex genie got stuck with a defective master, poor millennia old girl. -- I have enjoyed the sex scenes so far, so I will give it a few more chapters, ... But if I had gotten a Lucky break with a Sex Genie. I know I would react differently, ... but then I'm a horny guy, ... carry on, ... ;-) TTFN