All Comments on 'Sisterly Threesome'

A great first effort, I was really getting into the two sisters enjoying each other when the brother's friend arrived. I imagine this scenario will increase as the chapters grow, but if I have one fault it would be that the guy arrived too soon.

I would have loved the sisters to have enjoyed themselves for longer and brought in a male on chapter 2.

Great effort though.

Really good. Even better knowing it is your first effort. Please keep up this story line. It could get real interesting.

I must agree... absolutely fabulous for your first attempt!

Great grammar!

Great mix of dialogue and description.

I would have preferred the sex scenes be a little longer and the "self description" was a bit too long. I was tempted to stop reading during that description... made her too full of herself... too aware of how beautiful she is... I don't know many women like that... although they ARE out there.

Keep up the good work... I can't wait to read chapter 2, 3, 4, 5,... you get the idea!

This was lovely...well told and described.

If only I had someone to chat with like this!!!!!!

Keep up the good work!

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... why Madison changed so suddenly. You've got to give a reason so it's believable. Other than that, it was great, though it could have been stretched out longer. And the writing quality was much higher than is common. I hope you write more like this. [And a personal plea: leave out the anal stuff -- you've proved you can do so good without it. Stick with the dirty/naughty stuff and skip the dirty/gross.]

way to rushed you said in one page what should have taken atleast three to four no build up or background no reason why she kept the door locked since she was ten and no reason why she suddenly changed her ways and to just jump into a threesome is so stupid they should have had a few days alone before you brought in the threesome part which should have been with thier brother not his friend all in all a shitty story get an editor and do a rewrite

you need to continue this story... its hott =]

if her brother have joined, not his friend.