All Comments on 'Sister's Art Ch. 01'

Your story was very hot, however there were places in it that were difficult to follow because of grammatical errors. Our only suggestion is that you proofread your story a bit better before submitting it. We realize that you were probably a bit turned on while writing it, and typing with only one hand is difficult, (evil grin) but keep up the good work. We look forward to reading more of your story when your continuation is completed.

R & L

straightaway Akeepit up and do expect more in this series.

HOT HOT HOT,just great, looking forward to 02 and more

Good first chapter to what I hope will be many more of this interesting story. I think the pacing of the story and your character development are first rate. I really like the way you are building the sexual tension between everyone. Can't wait to read the next installment.

i loved it. the sister was great, and the brother acted like i would. it was amazing. i loved the way the mother with the sons piece only drew the brother and sister closer. i cant wait for part 2!

-Brodie

Terrific start. I look forward to the continuation.

enjoy the pace of the story. Most would just jump right into sex and it would be cheapened. This makes it more realistic. Can't wait for chapter two

Loved your story. Please don't stop here.

I like the way you are dealing with the feelings of the narrator in the story as well as the hot action that seems to be on the edge of eruption here. This promises to be very naughty and revealing for all of the charactors in this story.

Even with the occassional error in grammar, I rated it a 5 "becuase" the errors while evident didn't detract from the story too much. Do a lil more proofreading on the next 4 or 5 installments of this story. Very good erotica. As I was reading, and noticing that I was coming to the end, I was hoping a page 3 would magically appear. Can hardly wait for the next installment.

Excellent read!! It flowed very well and kept the interest up as well as other things. The only disappointment was it left off in the middle of things...ohhhh well, get the next parts out quickly.

Now that was simply hilarious! I laughed my ass off. I rated it "4" only because of the wrong classification, it should have been under "humor & satire". Perfectly funny, yet somehow arousing. Very good characters. Oh well, keep it hard!

Who gives a fuck about grammar when your hand is buried between your thighs, cursing the scroll bar when you have to move the page down??????

What a fucking wicked story!! Can't wait for the follow up!!!!!

But an excllent plot and not boring.

A good editor would do wonders for it

good except for the part about the father if he was somessed up from the breakdown why isn't he in an institution or nursing home it would have been better if you had not said anything about him since you only barely mention him in the begining then expect us to forget that he is in the story an editor and a good rewrite are in order i think

A great beginning , an original approach , a thoroughly enjoyable read ,

I enjoyed this, now on to part 2.

I hope they get together and have more fun.

THe thought of rubbing the plaster being rubbed over my sister's breasts and pussy is exciting.

I hope that becomes the next step and all three can HAVE SOME FUN AND SEX.

Truly a creative, original story. Well done!!!!