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AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Confusing to me. Though the flashback was interesting to me, I think it might have been left out as it served no real purpose. Surely. one of the two studs would have wanted rights to his son, governor or not, and a legal battle would have ensued. There were a couple of grammar issues, but all in all a good story line, and ready for more chapters. My suggestion would be to have someone proof it over before it is submitted. Keep writing.

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