All Comments on 'Slammin' Asses'

Great story. I loved the long slow build up and teasing, and wrestling with the moral dilemma. Hot action too. Well done.

good story . hope you do some more.

Stuff like this ruined the story for me.

Loved it...keep going till we get bored....

Next chapter please! Maybe some anal play?

Sequel please?

I rather liked this story, but I wanted to point out that 9 centimeters is 3.54 inches, so it would have been better to say '10 and a half inches' instead of '7 inches and 9 centimeters'. Also, I assume you did not mean 10 and a half inches, as that is somewhat excessive.

Still, nice attempt. I hope to see another from you.

id love to read a sequel !

Story was good, however an editor would have caught and fixed your mistakes

quit bashing...

enjoy the story.. without being a mathmatician or editor

was hot.. and i understood

Obviously you have been jerking it more than working it. It is actually quite easy to roll a girl from Missionary into Doggy without slipping out and you don't have to have a 10 inch cock to do it. You just need to actually understand the mechanics of sex and have a moderately flexible partner. It is far from instantaneous, but very doable.

To the author. Very nice job on your first story here. You could use some editing, and a little more detail on the build up would have been a benefit. You should consider adding about another 600-800 words to this story to flesh it out. A sequel could be nice, but push it out to Christmas, or as the sister will be starting her senior year, perhaps she could visit the school in preparation for attending after her graduation. You also left a nice window of opportunity to have the step mother as the animosity can be viewed as a cover up for attraction.

Good luck with future endeavors, hope to see more from you and your development as a story teller.

Formulaic

I thought you might have had her admit that she noticed the blind was pulled up and she noticed you were peeking. Then she would put on a show after the hot tub. That way she knew for sure you wee interesed.

Still a good story. Now for Chapter 2 have her invite one of her friends over to have a 3-way with her brother.

Brothers and sisters can help each other out without going all the way. It can be satisfying and and educational.

I hope there's more to this story. I like the characters and there's still plenty of time to develop them. Keep writing and please bring us another chapter.

Pullman, eh? Go Cougs!

Enjoyed this story.. hope they continue. :)

She was ready the day she told you she lost her virginity when she was 17. Hot tub only 2 times a week???? I would have had her there every night and get that top off.

Hot story and good writing except for the delay.

7 inches and 9 centimeters is nonsensical. 7 inches is 17.8 centimeters, 9 centimeters is 3.5 inches. Unless he's got an 11 inch dick - in which case, power to you and good for him, but that's no reason to split your measurement into two separate systems - you need to learn the difference between US Standard and Metric.

you are wrong! not every guy likes bare pussy. to me it reminds me of my seventh grade girlfriend and i cant get turned on by a child like pussy it must be hairy! and i bet i am not the only one. keep writing but add some hairy pussy once in a while.