All Comments on 'Sledge Hammered'

Quite entertaining.

Nice one PKenny5860

Although not a tale of epic proportions, I enjoyed it. Probably more so than did Wacko, the polish enforcer. LP

Not bad but no Peter Lugers in the “Second City” as that steakhouse is strictly in N Y. Brooklyn for the original with a newer one on the island

Sweet, simple little story!

5

Pretty detailed and sexy. Such a great story. I hope for more.

Zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz

Enjoyed the storyline. Think I need to read more of the Hammered Series. Also, I'll be catching up on PKenny5860 submissions, I liked his style.

"I heard you're the best in the business" - He's supposed to be the best in the business, but can't afford a decent air conditioner? I know it's part of the atmosphere, so why not have him be a second or third tier PI?

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Needed a Beta reader, at least, a lot of missing words. A generous 4.

Only 1 glaring problem. Hammered was in Chicago and Peter Luger's is in Brooklyn.

Othrwise a great story. 5*

Marcus D. Sade. Epic. :-)

Pretty straightforward romp true to the genre. The tale was well written with character development that was at least adequate for keeping the arc going. 5*

This should be in the non-erotic section. It is an interesting story. 4 stars from me.

love the way you write and a great addition to the series. no nitpicking here as always

Well done!

Just a damned good read!

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4 ****

Very nice!

Good story. I would have put the Big Pauly trip to Mexico with the wife, and all that ensue afterwards, at the end of the story. Sorry to nitpick but the story seemed over at that point and the Sally bit didn't really add much.

This was fun. 5

Very good story,

I think pendulous breasts are not as attractive as you seem to think they are. Synonyms are deflated and sagging.

Good story.

As noted already, Chicago is the Second City while Lugers is in Brooklyn. Gene & Georgetti would have been more appropriate.

Also, it’s the Magnificent Mile, not the Miracle Mile.

Sledge is taking control of the PI business. TK U MLJ LV NV

Giving your 5 stars for a well written tale. I personally do not like the Mickey Spillane type stories but yours was well done.

Damned good story!! Truly enjoyed it.

Fun tale. Too many typos though. A gave ya 5 anyway.

I think you nailed the PI thing nicely.

He sure turned on his accountant client quick. Coward.

Loved it, very well written and much in the style of the late,great(?) ,Mr.Spillane.

I thought, given the ambitious start as an crime detective story imitation, that you would come up with some nice elaborate plot but I guess this is too much to expect from LE writers. Style isn't everything, you need to put some meet on that plot instead of "Mexican whorehouse" LW cliché.

Perhaps this is a practice for something better down the road, lets hope.

That was a good one PKenny. I enjoyed that, and Micky Spillane wouldn't hate it.

It was a fun read. Hammered did real well thinking out loud.

@DonutHole:

Exactly how would someone "put some meet on that plot?" We're all dying to know.

Anyone remember the television show called "Sledge Hammer?" The eponymous main character's signature line was "Trust me, I know what I'm doing," upon stating which he proved conclusively that he didn't.

Great story....kept thinking Paul "Big Paulie" Castellano, but, he was Gambino boss that John Gotti had whacked.

@dark2donut2,

I don't see ANYTHING you've written that is any better. Did you mean "meat".

@sbrooks103x,

"I heard you're the best in the business" - He's supposed to be the best in the business, but can't afford a decent air conditioner? I know it's part of the atmosphere, so why not have him be a second or third tier PI?

Because it isn't your story. Write your story as you like, let others do the same.

A good that’s reflected correctly the private eve era from the dime novels and movies of the forties.

Score 5/5

Just corny enough to be genuinely funny.

Great story- liked the pace. Spillane like - enjoyable.

Excellent. Nicely written and I could imagine reading it in a book from a distant era. TC Ireland.

I don’t normally like detective stories. This one had just enough of the 1930’s to 50’s to draw the picture of Old Chicago with all of the images of the times after Capone went to prison. Tying the accountant was a great touch for those who know the Capone story.

Thanks for the story.

Keep Writing

JH4Fun

Well done

That was different! Thank you.

Wow, thanks for the trip down memory lane. It reminded me of all the Mickey Spillane books I read as a youth. 5+*.

Thanks for a fun read!