All Comments on 'Slow Burn'

It is more or less like the original story.

The changes didn't impact much on the ending of the story. Still the same ending.

I really sure like to know a little about how the ex-wife is faring...with the cat (if she had one).

i get that he was divorced a long time ago, but why support anything the whore did?

This was just silly.

I scored it lower than the first time around.

His revenge was lame.

When he got the divorce, he should've booted the unfaithful wife out into the street immediately. She'd be left penniless and all her snobby friends would've ostracised her for being poor... that would've hurt her far more than him subsidising her extravagant lifestyle for decades!

Also the second half of the story is mostly about the husband amassing vast wealth... but never having another relationship. With that much money, he could've replaced the ex-wife with a harem of hot women, but he lived like a pathetic hermit until his death. It's hard to feel any sympathy for the husband when he basically becomes Scrooge McDuck.

Read it before and was just as unimpressed!

Unfortunately, as emotional as you felt during your real life, about what you experienced.

This story, along with most that you post, are in the wrong category.

This belongs in non-dramatic....not in non-erotic.

This story is a fairytale that goes against a lot of preconceived notions but still is a fun read.

Some are asking why did he stay after he divorced her. For his motivation I can't say, in my so-called marriage it was a sadistic urge to watch her hang herself one thread at a time. It took someone from my past to make me see I had turned into someone I wasn't. So I do understand the story.

Wonderful. A life well lived despite his wife.

Thank you!

“… left. I had written and note about what I had envisioned when I bought all this…”

I hope when I write my last words, I proofread.

And this is the ‘edited’ version.

I find nothing wrong with this story. I have lived in Long Island in the "Five Towns" and worked on the North Shore on the Miracle Mile. The wife is a clone of many women who live , shop, and cheat there. Many of the husbands are much older, own businesses and are rich. They too indulge their shallow wives, and when they can't take it any longer lower the boom on the vapid trophy wives. Despite not being model quality, I admit having been chased by 4 married women in 3 years. One I even indulged sex with since I was unaware of her husband. Whether readers like it or not, this story rings true.

It just came to me: he should have left her a jar of applesauce. :)

As a work of literature it would probably be given an A or A minus. As a story intended to hold the readers interest it would have to be graded as a C or possibly a B minus effort. Around the start of the second page things started to get dull and the only reason to finish was to see if or how he got his revenge.

Although your idea of the auction reminded me of the auction of the movie "The Longest Ride" from 2015, based on a novel by Nicholas Sparks -who by the way also wrote "The Notebook"- Your story is entertaining and centered on the importance of hard work, initiative, creativity and family values as an honest way to happiness. Unfortunately, those principles not always lead to become financially wealthy, but certainly, they lead to a happy life, which for many is more important. Thanks for the effort and the story.

Ah, now eventually, you do plan to have erotica on your, on your erotic story, right? Hello? yes?

Sorry but not sure where the slow burn moment was but I don't think this had it, at least in my book. This story could've been better with less pages or details and the hubby should've gotten his burn while he was living. Not enough dialogue from the wife and felt like everything was rushed.

Fun, but very, very fictional.

Slightly more polished than the original, but lacking in the emotional turmoil he had to ahve gone through all those years. What did he do fo companionship, etc. 4*

Good changes. I also like KDAD9010’s idea of a jar or applesauce for Sweetie!

5*

appropriate name for this story (Slowwww Burn)

Too contrived and stilted. No emotion, no drama, just a bunch of money and some fancy shmancy legal maneuvering to make some point that escapes me. The wife ended up penniless, I presume, but only after she spent many years as a fun loving high rolling slut. For all we know her lover took her in and she's still having a ball getting laid by a man with a healthy heart who she apparently preferred to fuck anyway. Guess were supposed to not ask how her attorneys didn't read the will, which is supposed to be a public document. His tax forms, and many other records, should have shown that he was filing his taxes as an unmarried man. Whatever; obviously not important to your plot. Overall kind of underwhelming.

But thanks for the effort.

To me, there wasn’t a lot of change between the two versions. I enjoyed the original, and I enjoyed this one as well.

the rest of us should take heed and learn from lack of experience. TK U MLJ LV NV

I must have read the original - but, I enjoyed the re-reading very much. Thank you!

Sorry; dead people do not tell stories.

A great story of giving and outpouring of Love. Thanks for writing.

Good story!

4

This beautiful story will touch so many people's hearts.

Thank you for a touching tale, my second read.

somewhere east of Omaha

Never thought to see a quote from Martin Luther, in these pages, note, not Martin Luther King,but the original one. Pretty good story.

good "moal's" story but way over the top on $ and her "secret" divorce. good story nevertheless.

Having read this story ffor the first time < I am very impressed with it. It goes a long way in the BTB vein and has a lot of redeeming qualities for a family that started to fall apart but found the right path to true happiness. Cant say anything bad with your writing skills since you wrote a masterpiece

Absolutely preposterous!

that is the best story I have ever read or here. absolutely loved it. thank you for writing it. the anonymous people on this comment section whingeing are very small people.