by Egmont Grigor
no comments are needed on this story except "good reading".
G.Belgium
The story is really pretty silly, but very engagingly written. The only flaw is that is seems that halfway through what turns out to be the final chapter the author said to himself "What the fuck?! Time to quit" and so wraps it all up a breakneck pace. A somewhat more leisurely denouement would be good
a smooth flowing stream of a story where everything goes down just pat with no riffels of emotion or identifying with or caring of any of the characters, no waterfalls or whitewater of stress or care. not bad if one has nothing to do at the time
A good story, thank you for writing. I have read it at least once before, I have to go through the revenge stories every so often.