All Comments on 'Snow Ch. 03'

Good start. Let's see where this goes

5* Story

5* Writing

1* Chapter Length

I really enjoy where you're taking this, but I wish the chapters had some more length to them.

Either way, looking forward to where you'll take this.

Hi, I've read all three chapters and I agree with a previous comment, these chapters are too small for me, I prefer a story which makes progress and isn't the written equivalent of two strokes and a quick finish.

In some areas there is too much detail, such as a list of all the baby care products in the pod, this amount of detail isn’t necessary. I had carrot and coriander soup for dinner, I added a little black pepper and salt, it was served in a Royal Dalton china soup bowl decorated with a blue and white motif, the spoon was silver, a family heirloom….. or I could have said, ‘We had supper’.

Whilst mentioning that there may be too much detail, if you took out extra detail the story would be smaller.

I will read the next page when posted. There is much potential.

Please continue I am enjoying this so far

Nice start so far. Only critique I have is the chapters are short.

Very good SHORT story, five stars. While it certainly has potential to continue, it could just as easily stop here, without the traditional 'and they lived happily ever after'.

Thanks for a very good entertainment. I will be happy with whatever path the author chooses.

I like your story. I don't care if the chapters are short or long. I just want more.

Please don't end the story there. I really hope you are still writing this story. I know real life has plans that go arry and it takes people away from other things.