by violetsmokes
odd place for it to end up... but yeah... liked most of it think the tension could have been raised a little more however... keep it happenin' Cheers Roj
It is a Very Artistically Unique Masterpiece! NOBODY else could write this way! NO other story could impress me this much! Brilliant! You have my full vote.
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