All Comments on 'So I'm a Story?'

Thanks, keep writing!

Just listen: "every child should have the chance to come out of his mother's vagina." Damn right, and every boy should have the chance to go up into his mother's vagina, with his big hard cock. Alex's got a fat 8-incher, a real mommy-pleaser, and a pair of young balls filled with plenty of his rich creamy--and very potent-- semen. I trust that young Alex will soon fuck a baby up the same cunt where he was once a baby. Lucky motherfucker.

But it was a struggle to read it. Great idea. But, you really need an editor.

I don't understand why the start. Mr.X is writing a story with her as the main character, she kicks out her husband, allegedly for cheating that she was instigating on her own, by putting the lipstick mark on his shirt. So hubby has to go, but she could have fucked her son, w/o kicking hubby out of the home. Then she turns her attention to the son, and has him fuck her to climax and beyond. I am left thinking WTF? I am still wondering what this story is about. I think you could have done it slightly differently and it still would have been a hot story.

Rudy

And the story was great, nice twist in this story. The son gets fucked and so does dad, all at moms hands. It was a good read thanks...................

I had in my mind that this was just a dream of hers and she was going to wake up and her life was back to normal.

Then I had the thought that it could be like Groundhog Day, and recur every day until she got it right.

Whatever it is, the sex was good and I enjoyed the read. Thanks

I love this story it was great, I second the notion an editor would help. keep it going

intentional spelling mistakes / grammatical errors

story about a story of a woman thinking she is in a story.

in my opinion the Author is playing with the readers

for his own entertainment

loved this , bonkers , but beautiful , crazy , fun.

you really poke 2 fingers up at your detractors with this one.

& a giant 12 inch anal plug size finger at all the

Haters&Flamers of the genre in general.

this is wrong /thats wrong.

this character should do X .

that character should do Z

the events are not believeable

he's a joke

she's a whore .

the husband is a wimp /an asshole/superhero

lol its fiction jim , but not as we know it :)

xxxhugsxxx

Jessica woke up to an incredible sensations as Alex was slowly working his cock inside her pussy. She opened her eyes, and in the faint light she could see her son's face smiling down at her. "I'm sorry to wake you mom," Alex said. "I woke up hard inside you, and I just couldn't help but move a little." "I can't think of anything better than waking up to my son's cock moving inside me," Jessica purred. Since his mom was awake now, Alex began to pick up the speed and intensity of his thrusting. He loved the feeling of his mom's tits against his chest, her nipples poking against him. Jessica couldn't help but start moaning as her son's strokes were quickly exciting her. Alex brought his lips to his mother's for a passionate kiss. Alex broke the kiss as he looked down at his mom's face he said, "This is better than I could have ever imagined mom, I love you so much." "Oh I love you too honey, I've wanted this for so long," Jessica moaned back. Within seconds, she realized an orgasm was approaching fast. She couldn't help but start verbally expressing her pleasure. "Oh Alex, oh honey, you feel so good." "Pump that cock into your mother's pussy baby." "Oh Alex, oh god, I'm getting close!" When Alex heard that, he also knew that he wouldn't last much longer either, pumping his cock at nearly a frantic pace. "Oh mom, I'm almost there!" Alex exclaimed. "Oh honey, Oh honey!" "Cum inside me Alex!" "I'm going to cum too!" "Fuck me Alex!" "Fuck me!" Sweat dripping from his face, Alex was at the point of no return. All he could think about was slamming his cock into his mother, until he was releasing gobs of his cum inside her pussy. "Oh god, I'm coming mom!" Alex loudly yelled. "Oh Alex!" "Oh yes!" "Oh yes!" "Oh god honey!" "I'm coming too!" "Fuck me Alex!" "Fuck me honey!"

You could embellish it with further dialogues betwee the mother and unplugged computer. Intersperced with story development.

Quirky. But then so many great story ideas are.

Your Introductory dialogue was plausable.

You stories still can benefit with edtiing.

So , how do you get them into the next story? And what part does the narrirator play? Lots of ways this could go dont you think.

First to be an author, amateur or professional, one has to master the tools of his/her craft; in this case, the tool is the English language. The author simply doesn't know how the language works, it's punctuation, the concept of pronouns... Seriously, learn about commas, and when and how to use them.

Most importantly, proofread what you wrote. Have respect for your audience and write like an adult that went to a school.

I'm not trying to be mean. But you need to know that it's not enough to have interesting ideas. You must learn how to convey those ideas to others properly.

Now, the plot. Why was it made into a piece of 'self-aware fiction'. Watch the movie Stranger than Fiction with Will Ferrell. The reason for the main character being a work of fiction is important to the plot, and we understand who the author is and the conflict of the story, and its resolution, are dependent upon it being a work of fiction.

Why is it a work of fiction within fiction? We don't know and never find out.

Who is the author? We don't know and never find out.

The ending of the story is not an ending. What happens? Do they cease to exist? Do they break the fiction barrier?

The story could have been an actual story without the author telling the main character that she's in a work of fiction. (I mean, if it was written well and had an ending.)

Punctuation and grammar are your friends.