All Comments on 'Softball Dad Ch. 01'

Nice start. I prefer the slow build up over the wham-bam thank you ma'am approach so many take today. Good porn should be more than a SMS text. I look forward to the next installment.

keep it going would love to see how it ends

Great start only one problem for me not enough detail about why both of them would cheat on their spouses , but otherwise love the plot and the story building , keep it up looking forward to the next chapter

why was the husband looking for a little cheating ? he did not say anything bad

about his wife. all men look at women, married or not, but good married men

just look. not much morals on his part.

Looking forward to part 2

still waiting for part two , very good part one

and there can be no accusation of "quick release".

you also told us; " By the time the man and the woman in the story "do their thing," you will be convinced that they are really doing it."

would it be rude to say, promises, promises?

looking at the Tags, you intend(ed) for a lot more to follow.

does the coach come back early?

A wonderful beginning to this wonderful little suburban tale! I spend quite a bit of time in Long Island and know several couples with kids who've been tempted when involved in their children's activities. While their love for each other is there,it seems as though they miss the excitement and lust of new love.

There are several ways to go with chapter 2,based on how things have gone with the couples that I know. - Is it a one-time fling leading each participant back to the deep-seeded love they have for their spouse? Does it become an affair over time that eventually runs its course? Does it get messy with one or both being discovered in their adultery? Does the new pairing eventually lead to a long-term relationship with a reconfiguring of families and relationships? - Would love to see what way you take this! (And instead of the Mets at CitiField,maybe a Long Island Ducks game could be worked in! - lol)

Thank you very much for the feedback. Since I am not a pro, I am having a little bit of Writer's Block and not sure where to go with the story. Your suggestions are being considered for a chapter 2.

Glad you like it so far.

Cheating is cheating! Their both wrong. Nuff said.

Nice slow build. I suggest that you take this in a direction that isn't the norm. Perhaps Jennifer and Sandra can become "breast" friends and share Jim too. PUHLEEZE, no 8 inch cocks!!!!!

It seems a little bit like getting sucked into a whirlpool, it all seems a little harmless at the beginning. Good writing!