All Comments on 'Sold Teachers'

What you wrote is a wonderful outline for ten or twenty chapters. You have an outline but you did not color in the outline at all. You jumped from scenario to scenario without any continuity.

Reading this is like reading a box score of a game, but other that is over, it did not develop any feeling or emotion or may I say interest in what happened.

It could have been great, but it wasn't.

I found your plan for a story very interesting I hope to read the story when you submit it

Your stories have been imaginative and entertaining.

This story is better written than most of your others. I quite enjoyed this. I look forward to reading more, but I do recommend a friendly proofreader.

You write your stories in such a fast tempo, that the readers can't keep up with who is who.

You have a great potential stories, but you could benefit of having a co reader to read them before publishing. We need more descriptions, but the story itself is very good and the idea is great.