All Comments on 'Soldier Boy Ch. 03'

You should probably spend some time reading things over before you submit them. You switch named in the middle of actions, right from the beginning. It detracts heavily from what seems to be pretty hot action.

Hope that helps you!

LustySCribe may not have read the previous chapters, where the characters were introduced as "Mark Davis" and "Walt Logan." The author goes between referring to them by their first and last names. Perhaps he could have done that better, but it's not a mistake. The more important point is that it's great to have another chapter after two years! Very hot!