All Comments on 'Soldier Homecoming - Long Version'

I loved the story and the sex but there were so many minor errors, it got very frustrating having to stop to figure out what the correct word should be. Get an editor or a proofreader for future stories.

Loved the story but I just thought some parts dragged on just a bit to long. Normally I really like that the build up and back story are the best parts but reguardless amazing story and I hope my constructive feedback helps..

This was such a good, naughty, slow burn story that had all the tension that we expect in a taboo relationship.... building up into the inevitable union of the two impassioned lovers.

Other than a few misspellings, loved this! Love your other work I've read! Keep writing!

Thanks!

For a mom with large breasts not enough intense tit play, sucking, this would be natural for son of this age who should be possessed by the tit thing, I would b.

Writing needs help.

The overall story had promise, but there are simply too many grammar errors which made this story hard to read. Next time get someone to proofread before posting.

loved the innocence

Very intensely erotic.

I like that his mom had long nipples and a very thick hairy bush. I cannot imagine a real mom without a very hairy bush--a real mature woman.

The story was nice, but unbelievably slow paced. The one thing that I found a bit annoying was the lack of talking from the son. The first 4 pages were basically him acting like a mute as his mother was trying to talk to him. This story could have been compressed into 3 pages maximum. Other than that, i like the idea.

Wow! My first sexual encounter was with an older woman, (not my mom), but my next door neighbour, and the way you described things it was like I was being transported back in time 50 years. The similarity was uncanny and yes, I am that old. Things never worked out for us long term, but thank you for reminding me of that part of my life. The way you ended this story makes me think you are planning another chapter, I certainly hope so.

I’m convinced the MC must be autistic. 4 pages of his mother asking him questions while he just stared at her like an idiot. And no man I his 20s would need be told 8 or 9 times “I want you in me” and still be confused about what she wanted. I quit reading just pay this point. It felt like she was trying to have sex with her mentally challenged child.

Glad the author had the guy an army man instead of a marine. Probably should choose a different profession such as a hairdresser. Even a trained army man couldn't be that whimsy and indecisive.

Mom had to do EVERYTHING. Is this who we have defending us???

The only thing that was off on this is the son not talking to his mom in the first instance,,, he was like a zombie