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All Comments on 'Soleil School of Magic Ch. 01'

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ZZchromosomeZZchromosomeover 4 years ago

Interesting start, let's see where it goes.

AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago

Looking forward to the next chapter.

UltimateHomeBodyUltimateHomeBodyover 4 years ago
Nice start

Shame you followed the parents having sex. Why not the main character, don't care about secondary ones.

AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago
An erotic Hogwarts in the making?

Good start, this could be lot of fun! You have a laid the ground work for a wonderful new adventure in erotica and magic. More please!

HiFrancHiFrancabout 1 year ago

It had a good start but I was disappointed by the direction that it went in. The set up clearly flagged that this was David’s (and possibly Karen’s) story. The switch of focus to his parents and their visitor felt like an unnecessary distraction.

I skipped paragraphs trying to find where we pick up with both, or just one, of those that had just been offered a place.

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