- Mind Control
- Son of Sleep Ch. 01
- Comments
All Comments on 'Son of Sleep Ch. 01'
by JCBeleren
- 92 Comments
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoBetween this and "My Car, My Rules", you are on a roll!
john_sixfooteralmost 5 years agoWhat a great introduction to what should be a GREAT series!
I look forward to reading all you write.
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoAs a mythology buff, it's nice to see someone other than the big names get some visibility. I like the start and the pace, looking forward to more.
TSreaderalmost 5 years agoA great start to this story! Well done! And thank you for sharing this with us! I’m certainly waiting for more of this!
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoThe writing is definitely some of the best i've seen on this site, and i can't wait to see what else you have in store!
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoLove the hanging mystery of a boy experiencing his power but not really knowing what it is or how to control it.
Casteller1985almost 5 years agoA nice setup as always, keep going on!
MasterDonald101452almost 5 years agoVery good Story line can't wait to read more !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoJCB, you have the beginnings of a great story, cannot wait to see part 2.
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoI love your writing style, please keep writing, and fast
wm73almost 5 years agoReally looking forward to seeing where this goes. Most excellent so far.
thehornybanthaalmost 5 years agoThis seems great, but can you please not go into the incest shit that crops up incessantly across the MC genre. I personalty don't like it and I feel it's just overdone.
timothynoulletalmost 5 years agoI love this story so far I hope you will continue with this story
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoSo, it looks like two possibilities - either the sight of his penis entrances people, or he is now capable of entrancing them at will in his presence. The second definitely offers more possibilities, but the first offers situations that are comedic leading into sexual (I can see the bully/bullies catching him after he runs to the locker room or bathroom so he can "whip it out" to save himself). Thank you for a semi-original concept.
jtukeealmost 5 years agoA great start with some new twists. Take your time to craft the next installment. I am really looking forward to it.
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoThis was such a great story I can't wait for you to continue it!
ironmoose007almost 5 years agoThis will definitely need more chapters. Great job on the first of many, I hope.
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoA good, different beginning. Not a lightning strike or chemical accident. A gift from the Gods, in addition his father. Hopefully will add restraint, not just vengeance and blaten sex.
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoFirst trance then this, i love it all. Hopefully the next chapter will be out soon.
mole114almost 5 years agoMore please want to see him get revenge and payback lol good start enjoyed it
nighthawk22204almost 5 years agoThanks for a very interesting story line, much more creative than finding a magic ring in a grandfather's luggage. Lucky Paige to be the recipient of our hero's powerful birthday blessing from his Heavenly Father. But we haven't seen any mind control yet, have we? Will we? Has Alexander been blessed with the power of social seduction, or only if he flaunts his magic wand in the presence of a lady? Does his power only work on women? Will Mr. O'Conner and Jared also be attracted to his God-given mystique? Does Alex have a new pervasive pheromonal presence that will attract every female in his class, or will he learn a control technique to reduce his power to tolerable levels? I hope we'll see what happens.
JackiReturnsalmost 5 years agoLove this! Was the mind control something that kicked in when he fantasized about her?? Or is it whenever anyone sees his penis? Can't wait to find out.
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoYou write superbly well! The premise is fascinating too. Keep going!
stubble64almost 5 years agoYou have a great storyline and I can hardly wait for the next chapter. Well done!
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoThis was absolutely amazing! Please keep going I can't wait to see how the story land out!
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoThis looks to be heading into a fun, sexy story well worth reading.
Great work.
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoI liked your story, will continue reading
Imbenevolentmasteralmost 5 years agoI've only just discovered your writings, but I'm hooked! You're a fantastic storyteller, and articulate! Thanks for letting us enjoy your imaginings...
Anonymousover 4 years ago....from Greek Mythology, while not sticking to the cultural imperatives, follows broader themes (gods and demigods screwing humans to create superhuman traits in the mixed offspring. Even the Christian ethic follows similar themes with fallen angles and the giants in the earth. Sort of Percy Jackson-ish in its departures.
That all said, so what? It’s a great story about a kid that’s been an outcast all his life and suddenly finds himself on his 18th birthday to be a sexual demigod with the looks, the bod, ....and other hardware necessary to the role. That he bored his best friend, an admitted slut, leaving her comatose, says a lot for his capabilities. Let’s see who else he ends up bedding. And what comeuppance he dishes out to his tormentors....for that is the dream of all geeks, surviving their middle and high-school years. I will read on with interest.
Thank you.
flynndriderover 4 years agoGreat story.
Not sure what kind of "friend" outright admits to having a thing for the guy that bullies him, but it makes it easier to control her without feeling bad
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Anonymousalmost 4 years agoEnjoyed the start to your story, only the second of yours I have read, after The Negotiator. It has some nice touches, including taking the time to have Alexander's GF Paige wear a pretty pair of black panties for his de-virgining. And you have kept him from shooting her full of his cum at least until he finds out if she is on the Pill. And you have set his Cute Mother up for some of his future attentions. Good stuff, Thanx for the Read.
DrofLove957over 1 year agoSo far so good. Keep on writing. I for one happen to like stories about the Greek/Roman Gods.
PantherStrife89about 1 year agoHow ironic would it be if a son of Zeus is in love with Hera, and he would pray in her Temple and she takes notice, and she falls in love with this OC son of Zeus?
Anonymous5 months agoFinally gets to fuck his hot friend, who is apparently no stranger to sex or drugs and that kind of thing, but doesn't cum inside. How disappointing. I hope it gets better.
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