All Comments on 'Sophia Pt. 04'

You have intetinally misread my posts. In my Feedback posts in Part 2... Part 3 and in part4 ALL I have ever said is from DON's point of view this is HE thinks.

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the ENTIRE and sole purpose of these women getting to gether to UN dork DON is to Build up his confidence correct?

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<b>BUT if Don THINKS that have totally rejected him... who cares of Maria SECRETLY has the hots for Don? How does THAT help Don? </b>

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who cares if Vennessa has the SECRET hots for Don?

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<b>As I have said 6 times now You cannot HELP boots Don's shattered confidence especailly sexually by engaging in a James Bond like conspiracy to chase away all women he meets while at the same time NOT fucking Don. Its destroying him . </b>

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Again I am NOT trolling. The charge is deeply unfair.

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You and many others may disagre with me and thats fine... but if I am spending the time to cut and paste whole excerpts from the story to debate you ...that is just not trolling.

your post is another advertisement of your stupidity!

i never said something about don's last sexual experience. in fact i agree it's over 3 years. BUT that is NOT the point, now is it?

you said that the ladies aren't interested in don sexually. you said this in your penultimate post and you harped on it on your first post.

i've proven that this is NOT the case. maria and her 3 friends have the hots for don. i asked for proof where you got the idea the ladies don't find don sexually attractive.

in your gross stupidity, you offer DON's thinking. in logic, this is what we call non sequitur!! don's thinking has nothing to do with the way the ladies feell about him. though don may think he's the biggest loser ever, the ladies think otherwise.

in fact, all of them will gladly fuck don for a week given a chance.

stop your trolling lest people see what an idiot you really are!

I am absolutely enjoying this story, but to answer MelloYellow's question about Sophia, I don't recall CastleStone revealing it explicitly, but if you recall, prior to Don's fixation with 'Unchain My Heart,' he was watching a movie over and over. From the hints given, I believe this movie was 'Houseboat' starring Cary Grant and Sophia Loren wherein, at one point, Cary hires Sophia as a maid even though she can't cook, clean, or make coffee.

Even for a dimwit like You that argument is absurd.

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My question is/ was <b> WHEN was the last time DON has sex?</b> It was over 3 years ago. Don getting the ocassional pleasant French Kiss s Making things <b> WORSE </b> for him not better.

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Morever the story is FILLED with DON internal thinking that Maria is NOT interested in him...<b> Unchain my heart? </b>..... any of that ringing a bell Sherlock?

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<b> while it is True that Venessa and Eva etc do express sexual desire about Don HE does not about this</b>. To him he still looks like a total cuckold loser!.

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In part 3 Don is ACTIVELY wondering what is wrong him him.

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<i>The thing that really hurt was that they were eventually going to try to get me a date with someone other than them. I was kind of really hoping that one of my new friends was maybe interested in me romantically. Who am I kidding? I was hoping that the kiss with Maria actually meant something and maybe she was in love with me. Let's get real - Maria is a rich, beautiful ex-model and I'm just a cuckolded dork. </i>

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<i>There is method to my madness, now that my stupid fantasy had been destroyed when I finally found out that Maria actually didn't have any romantic interest in me at all, and her friends didn't either. I am going to take advantage of every opportunity I get to meet women. Maria and her friends like my cooking; I figure I can use that to break the ice with other women. But I won't move too aggressively yet, I will wait until I get to be almost a regular here, then I'll start to casually converse with some of the available women at the club. As Maria has said, I am a dork; </b>

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KATHY "Quite possibly we are the first adults that he has begun to trust since his divorce. He is probably desperate for some adult friendship. Well, you read the report about his old friends and family.<b> Now we, his first friends since his divorce, just betrayed him, too." </b>

While agree with most of you previous posts, today, I don’t. With the nonsense you wrote, IT IS TROLLING! Your comment/conclusion is NOT based on facts (as told in the story).

You say, “And the last 6+ months of that has been spent around hot sexy women who all think DON is Beneath them and have made it clear they are not in the least bit interested in Don sexually”

I say, HUH!?

Did you read the story? How did you arrive to this conclusion? Did you understand what you read? Am really confused. Castlestone wrote it in English! Pls show me the parts that support your statement.

Here's the deal harry.

1.MARIA is sexually interested in Don. Let’s examine some the FACTS:

Chap1, pg5, Maria said …1. ”Oh my, oh my, not bad, not bad at all. A bit bigger than normal, entirely adequate. Let us also remember, that he was quite cold at the time. Things might be scrunched up a bit.” 2. “Now to check out his back and ass. Hot damn, we have a winner. It was like looking at Arnold's ass from the first Terminator movie.

Chap2, pg7 maria narrating.. I grabbed his ear, pulled his face to mine and kissed him. Oh it was a pretty good kiss for being closed mouth. Maybe I should open my lips a little. Oh! My tongue seems to have a mind of its own and is lightly touching Don's lips. His lips are opening. Oh! Very nice, very, very nice. He is being so gentle, but I can feel that he is restraining himself from a passionate fire waiting to take control. His hands are absolutely rigid, like two pieces of steel on my back. I can just feel that he wants to clench me to him so fiercely that I would be robbed of my ability to breathe.

My nipples grew hard, strained against my bra, and I started to get wet down below. A little more coaxing and he will be mine, maybe just a little more with my tongue. Oh, god, please let him love me in spite of my awful past!

Chap3, pg10 .. maria talking about don’s ass “..and with the way Don's ass looked last night I could understand why it was so "grabbable", but dammit, it was MY ass to grab!”

Chap4, pg3.. maria and don’s woodie, “…I must say that Don was sporting a fairly impressive morning woody and it was blasting off right through the fly in his boxer shorts. It was huge!”

2. Vanessa has the hots for don:

Chap3, pg4.. Vanessa relates “…Last night was almost magical with both of us on the dance floor, like you see in those old movies that Don enjoys. Everyone was watching us, and we were on center stage. I know that Maria has first shot at him, but I've nearly completely fallen for Don. After I got home from our date, I almost booked a dive vacation for the two of us, except I didn't plan on any diving.”

Chap3, pg5:Vanessa says “…No, Maria I'm not going after him. At least I won't go after him as long as you're interested in him. I've partially fallen for him”

3. Freddie finds don sexy:

Chap3. pg9.. Freddie says “…Don't hit me Maria; I couldn't help myself! Don is a really great guy and he's becoming sexy as all hell. …There Don was with his tight body and dressed up in his new suit, and you said it yourself - he reminds you of a knight. For tonight, I was his damsel in distress and I did what damsels are supposed to do with their heroes.”

4. Kathy finds don sexy:

Chap4,pg2 kathy says “…Maria, you don't have to worry about me, I would never poach. But I am now firmly in the 'Official Don Fan Club'. He is more than enough of a 'bad boy' for me. If you change your mind about him or things don't work out between the two of you, I want my shot at him!"

Chap4, pg3, Kathy reacting to don’s woodie “Just before she left the room she turned to me grinning and held up her hands over a foot apart…”

Haryy, any man with a modicum of intelligence will conclude all these women are sexually interested in don. To show the fallacy of your statement, I only have to prove that at least one of them is (sexually attracted to don). I have shown all of them are.

You posted a statement sans factual basis. That makes it nonsense. Posting nonsense is TROLLING!

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Two points to add. First WHEN was the last time DON get laid? Anyone...?

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The story Opens --PART 1-- with Don telling us that when he rescued Maria it was 2.5 years ago since he caught his whore wife.

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Its NOV and when he meets Vanessa Freddie and Kathy for the 1st time the first snow fell. Part 3 is around the Holidays and part 4 is in spring / summer.

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<b>TOTAL = 3 YEARS.</b>

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And the last 6+ months of that has been spent around hot sexy women who all think DON is Beneath them and have made it clear they are not in the least bit interested in Don sexually.

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and all of recent "dates" have lasted less than 30 minutes .

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SECOND point : making a detailed well written feeback post that is NOT under anonymoys is NOT a troll post. Simply because some of stupid bastards out there dont agree with a harsh review of this silly story .... that does NOT make any post a TROLL Post.

I always make it my top priority to read your new chapter when it comes out. This is one of my all-time favorite stories here. I especially liked the imagery at the end of this chapter. Keep up the good work.

<p>... I have some of the same misgivings as some of the others.</p>

<p>I mean I have to say I enjoy reading it. I often find myself lost in time while I'm reading and 20-30 minutes just flew by and I didn't even notice it. Its very good and very engaging</p>

<p>But you have a lot of threads open in the story. That doesn't hurt it in my opinion, for what that's worth, but it does leave me as the reader wanting to know more (what happens with Barbara's therapy? What about his slutty twin sisters, do they ever get caught after they causes so much damage to Don and his family? Does the judge "ever" get called on the abuse of her authority? Does the people who helped screw him out of money ever get theirs? .. etc) but that's not the main point I'm curious about</p>

<p>The story you've written so far, and I personally think this is why everyone feels the ladies are too far controlling, is as written every female in your story is pretty "heavily" experienced with men. The Wife cheated with 24 different partners over 3 years before she was caught. The twin sisters, Don eludes to them being pretty wild, they slept with other men while married, and one of them is alleged to have had a child by another man and is passing the child off as her husbands. Maria is known in her circles as at one time being an easy lay. Kathy in the stories was mentioned as the "Queen" of the one night stands. Just about everyone woman that Don has encountered, has slept with just about every man that crossed their path they had interest in and some they didn't.</p>

<p>But in the cause of poor Don, nada. Every time he gets <i>close</i> to having sex with someone else, the women sabotage it to keep him pure for Maria. On the balance scales how is that exactly fair? It's like they want to keep his character in the dark about whats out there. If Don's character had a chance to see what was out there, maybe get a few under his belt, like every woman in the story so far has done, I bet most readers wouldn't have as much problem.</p>

<p>But as it stands right now, while the love story with Maria is great, its at the expense of part of his life. Other people have deprived Don of a lot of things (His wife robbed him of his marriage, his self respect, his manhood, and all of his friends, his sisters of his wife, his friends of what his wife was doing, his new friends of any possible relationship that isn't Maria, etc) he should have a "few" experiences outside of Maria. As his character stands he'll only have "2" relationships in his life, while everyone else will have had a bounty of them to draw from and grow from.</p>

<p>Good writing, but If you developed Don a little more to have more experience, like the therapist his ex-wife is seeing suggest that they would have had him do to bring his marriage back on an even balance, that would make most readers I think accept Don and Maria's relationship once he finds out what the ladies have done, and about Maria's varied past.</p>

<p>Thanks for the intresting read so far.</p>

-Risq

I somewhat liked your earlier chapters, but each chapter kept getting worse and worse. i agree with vulvan and the guy before him, how much of a punk are you going to make don out to be? and whats with the women acting so apologetic about the immoral invasion of his privacy but think its okay to bug his phone, sabotage his dates and basically act condescending to him, including his "baby girls"? i think vulcan said it perfectly--- Never mind that Don can be physically tough when necessary, never mind that he can cook, is good with tools, cares a lot for his daughters, is gentle, loyal, good-looking, and has a big dick; it's clear he is being controlled by a conniving, conspiratorial gang of females with the same helplessness as a mighty warship in an ocean storm. Is this how the author sees relationships between men and women? We men joke about "who's the boss" and such, but we can do so because we men (at least those who are really men) know deep down that we are at least equal and we do have a modicum of control, when we wish to exercise it. While it may seem harmless fun, and probably this is the author's satire, the idea sabotaging dates, of bugging and controlling the cell phone of someone you like/love, who trusts you, who would never dream of doing anything like that to you, it's just over the top. I guess I'm too serious, but the humor is fading over this. Why have the ideas of honesty, communication, and genuine respect disappeared? Maria can't tell Don her true feelings for him because she would have to reveal her previous wild times and he then would not respect her? and the guy who said to ignore us illiterate aholes, well, you can go fuck yourself. my final point is that i hope you have Don man up and have his so called friends and family to stop treating him shit and to have him find out just how conniving and manipulative those bitches were to him, because honestly, if its okay for maria to whore it up left and right, why the fuck cant don go on a few dates? and dont let don let them off the hook too easily. thanx for your time and srry if i sounded like a dick, but this chapter really sucked.

I enjoy your stories, they have all the elements that keep me coming back for more. Keep up the good work.

the semi literate comments of a few people,yhere are always jealous idiots around,This is one of the best stories that have appeared on this site for a long time.It contains a more than adequate amount of humour,and it is very well written.Don't let the imbeciles drive you away,as they have so many of the good authors.I look forward with great anticipation to more episodes.By the way,some of Helgas inventions(if they were real)would be best sellers.

I like this story and have already left one comment, but after noting some of the comments from the inevitable trolls I just want to reiterate you are doing a fine job. Please note that most of the trolls don't have the balls to post as anything other than anonymous, and those that do give a name are strangely lacking in any creative endeavors on this site.

Fortunately some of the outstanding contributors seem to love what your doing. Let that be your guide. I'm afraid that many of these anonymous trolls don't have the intelligence or imagination to understand the development of complex characters and such concepts as the metaphor, irony, and sarcasm.

Keep up the good work. For those who don't like your content or characters....stop reading and write your own, or get therapy!

Please continue the story without all the side bars that don't seem to lead anywhere. Pt 04 just rehashed all the feelings everyone has had through the first three. I still like the story but the two main characters have to get together soon. All in all this story is another good work from you even if it is getting to be longwinded.

The humor is getting a little overdone, and I'm surprised that Don is so easy to manipulate. The women have made him even more of a dork, as at least one other reader stated, so I really don't see what the "chiseling" has done for him. In "Carol's Patch Job," the male "hero" was clueless about his wife's cheating, he was physically weakened by his illness and hospitalization, and it seemed that the female characters controlled everything in his life. Why do I have the feeling that the same applies to this story? Never mind that Don can be physically tough when necessary, never mind that he can cook, is good with tools, cares a lot for his daughters, is gentle, loyal, good-looking, and has a big dick; it's clear he is being controlled by a conniving, conspiratorial gang of females with the same helplessness as a mighty warship in an ocean storm. Is this how the author sees relationships between men and women? We men joke about "who's the boss" and such, but we can do so because we men (at least those who are really men) know deep down that we are at least equal and we do have a modicum of control, when we wish to exercise it. While it may seem harmless fun, and probably this is the author's satire, the idea sabotaging dates, of bugging and controlling the cell phone of someone you like/love, who trusts you, who would never dream of doing anything like that to you, it's just over the top. I guess I'm too serious, but the humor is fading over this. Why have the ideas of honesty, communication, and genuine respect disappeared? Maria can't tell Don her true feelings for him because she would have to reveal her previous wild times and he then would not respect her? Don can't reveal his true feelings because he hasn't the confidence and self-esteem to handle rejection if Maria does not like him as more than a friend (of course, his former wife and her cheating did this to him)? I sense that the roles of traditional male and female are reversed to a degree in this long story. The women are confident, take-charge people who control everything. The man (Don) is emotionally a wimp. The women all cheat, fool around, sneak around, and have wild times. Don the man (if you call him that) is faithful and demur, and a good cook to boot. I think that any more of this and any sex between Don and Maria will be anti-climactic. And they all better hope that when Don exchanges his cell phone and he is notified that it shows signs of tampering, he does not simply leave (which is what I would do in a flash) and become a hermit. His ex-wife cheated on him but at least, she did it privately and tried not to humiliate him. The abrupt departure of his "dates" and his social failures, the spending of exorbitant amounts of money (by Maria) on both him and his daughters; heck, he won't even drive a car on a date because he is weak-willed and the woman needs to be in total control, well, it's getting to be too much. The credibility of what began as a nice love story is suffering, and I am curious to see if the author can redeem himself and make Don into a confident person by the end of the story.

This chapter has been disappointing on a number of levels.<P>

(1) No advancement at all of the central plot - the romance between Don & Maria hasn't evolved from the last chapter.<P>

(2) The whole James Bond thing is absurd: a secret chip to bug and completely control Don's phone, a new electric static glue, a fart pill, a high-tech stink bomb.<P>

(3) In earlier chapters, the women (including Don's own daughters) were mildly condescending towards Don. Now they have become downright offensive in their disrespect for him and their manipulation of his life.<P>

Don was devastated and humiliated by his ex-wife's treatment of him. After leading Don along for months, including some "practice dates", these women, who are meant to be his friends, go out to sabotage his life when he finally starts getting it together enough to start real dating. What's more, they sabotage his dates in ways that lead all three of his dates to run out on him. Far from un-dorking him, damaging his frail confidence in matters of romance is likely to push him back into his shell.<P>

Imagine his feelings of betrayal if and when he finds out that his closest friends and daughters deliberately interfered to wreck his tries to make a new love life. Even though they profess to act for the apparently "noble" reason of getting Don & Maria together, are they really any less conniving than his ex-wife was? Will Don feel that their behaviour is nearly as disrespectful as hers was?<P>

The very experienced Maria knows that Don is starving for love, but she strings him along, deliberately sends mixed signals, denies him any real romance, forbids her friends (who have shown an interest in him) from getting too close and then starts wailing when he wants to date others. Her friends and his daughters collude to bug/control his phone, and then prevent him having any love life, since Maria is disinterested.<P>

Other commentators have suggested that Maria and her friends must think that Don (being a self-professed dork) will be no good as a lover, which explains why they think he needs improvement, and also explains why Maria's holding off on making a real move. I agree with this view.<P>

But how on earth could Maria and the others feel that the behaviour displayed in this chapter will make Don a better lover and less dorky?<P>

Love is meant to be a partnership based on honour and mutual respect. Not manipulations, deceit and sabotage.

Overall I still like this chapter, but there's something that not quite good like the previous one.

Still, looking forward for your next chapter.

I am having SO much fun reading this story... Thank you!

It was a lot of reading and took a lot of time and energy, but in the end I had a good happy feeling! Thanks!

I got a big hoot out of this chapter.

Boyd

When I opened this part (4) and saw that it was 10 pages, my first thought was so long! But having read the proceeding parts I just had to continue. When I got to page 8 and noticed that there were only 2 pages left I felt that I would have liked more pages.

I enjoyed all the Bond Theme and the "toys", keep going I an really enjoying the story.

I was right (from Part 3). The premise is unbeleiveably

stupid. Yet most readers seem to think this is GREAT story.

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Maria loves Don but cannot tell him nor will she fuck him. Even worse Don's close women friends who are SUPPOSE to be trying to Un- Dork DON are actually sabotagig his dates so Don NEVER has ANY sex.

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of course makes Perfect sense.... NOT !!!!

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Given how his ex wife betrayed crushed publicly humilated Don... <b> HOW exactly is it GOOD to have his new women "Friends" reject Don sexually THEN engage in CONSPIRACY to run DON's life for him?</b>

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How will Don REACT when he finds out All those woman

"close friends" who say they are trying to Help have been stabbing him in the back?

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<b>Rationally... based on the way this author has written this plot... when Don finds out he will only conclude

all these "friends" are laughing at him. If I were Don

I would kill myself.</b>

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who the Fuck appointed these arrogant god dam bitches Lord protector of England and Don?

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The BOND thing is Lame and Dumb. It is a clever ploy used by the author in order to distract the reader as to what these women are REALLY doing.

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Frankly its fucking offensive.

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As I said in part 3 the whole undorking of Don think is NOT about Don at all. The REAL reason why None of these women have gone after Don is that they think he is lousy in bed.

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<b> In other words Maria being conerend about how Don will react to her sexual past is just a fancy way of saying the fear that Don will be inept in bed.</b>

30 pages+ yet Don and Maria still havent fucked? Someone in part 3 feedback said Maria so called concern over her sexual past scaring off Don was a crock... and that the real reason is that Maria et al think Don is not up to their sexual standards. More and More that looks to be the case.

I am thoroughly enjoying the story and have a feeling that I will want more when it ends. I agree with a previous comment that the story reminds me of an old Cary Grant movie with humor and enough excitement to keep the reader captivated.

Thank you!!

Almost as if you were being paid by the word.

Congratulations, It's just getting better. I truly enjoyed this chapter..I read it twice !! Keep up the good work !

I think Don have the worst case of blue balls of all mankind.

Poor Don still has blue balls from the infinite foreplay, but the date sabotaging was absolutely hilarious. I think I liked this chapter the best so far. Fascinating and frustrating story! Well done.

I am not usually a fan of romance stories, but you do have a gift, you make the characters leap of the page. It is well written, you should consider submitting your work to a few a agents and see what happens

Excellent 4 was even better than the other three, did not think that would be possible.

Dude, I *really* like your writing, but you're kinda suffering from diarrhea of the word processor with this installment... The added "plot twists" aren't really advancing the story, they're just dragging it out longer!

Regardless, I still give you top marks because you're a very talented writer and I love the humor, love the writing style, sorta love the characters (though they're getting a bit over-the-top) and am looking forward to the next chapter!

Can't get enough of this story, I think 10 pages for each chapter is too short. I don't want this to end, I like to read more about each character. The bond part was a little bit off, but still was amuzing. O.k. now for the most important stuff: WHEN ARE THEY GOING TO END IN BED??????

a fairy-tale most part of it but fun. but finally every fun ends sometime, well not exactly. I remember that black and white tv-series with dr. kimble who tried to prove that he did not kill his wife. I guess I saw some 600 parts but unfortunately it never came to an end. I guess you will never come to the point and I would have to read 10 more chapters each 10 pages long before he finally finds out he likes the woman a bit or before she gets her bad secret out at least for the reader or before anybody knows who sophia is. so thanks for the story but I got tired of spock and captain kirk , 007 and the cake.

a real chick flick! when do they cast the movie? george clooney as don and maybe eva mendez as maria?

great...i hope in the next installment that don and marie finally do get together ..and that she is finally honest with him ...and let him know that what went before was before...as this story is written they have to end up together or it would be a total waste thanks for the great read so far ....roadbird

totally enjoy the story and the humor, but who the heck is Sophia

Can't wait for Pt. 5. Was glad to see "Roscoe" was still there. I find myself having to go back and read all the

Parts every several days, while awaiting the next one.

Wow, each chapter keeps getting better and it's hard to beat perfection. I feel like I'm a junkie for this story so please don't keep us waiting too long for the next chapter so I don't go into withdrawal too badly.

This story is wonderful! The "Bond" theme was slightly uncharacteristic but it made me laugh out loud. If you're going to provide recipes for THE CAKE, THE PIE, etc., can you please include one for THE PILL? I have a few choice targets for mischief. :)

Love this story. My only complaint is the long wait in between chapters. Can't wait for part 5.

I've been checking several (hundred) times a day for part 4 since part 3 came out. I managed to ration it for an hour or so since it was posted but now I have to wait for part 5 :-( Great story

I can't get enough of this story, so well written and romantic. I could though do w/o the bond stuff lol And please lets get on with their ROMANCE!! lol

The characters are a bit larger than life, and that's the way I like it! CastleStone has a real knack for romance and comedy. If this were a movie, it would be a chick flick, and I love to watch them. Thanks for all the work. I would suggest more frequent, shorter chapters, but I am in this to the end.

Nice one CS your doing well with your stories.

I'm still sooooo very hooked on this story. I don't particularly care if it ever finishes, I just wanna keep reading about all my favourite characters, and their latest escapades.

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Thank you once again dear author for entertaining me (and all your other readers) so.

Really looking forward to the next part. You are one of the few authors I check daily for new chapters.

OK I was wrong I went back and finished it, you redeemed yourself and reverted to your usual style, and the story actually got back on track after the silly "james bond" rubbish, once again I apologies for not reading all the way through before voting, hopefully chapter five will start and continue on track.

I am so sorry but I must say that you have really disappointed me, the first two "chapters" were great, the third had a strange feel to it as though someone else wrote it and now the fourth chapter has just ruined it , what are you on, you seem to have purposely buggered it all up, earlier is was believable if a little tongue in cheek, now I had to give up after page 5, sorry I was really enjoying this , I wont be reading any more.

I think this is the best in the series so far. You are now moving Maria and Don closer to what we are expecting in the story. I would still check your works everyday for part 5 (lol). Quite simply, you got us enthralled with "Sophia". All the best to you and your editor.