All Comments on 'Sorry Forever'

Writing is good, nothing original here. 3 stars.

one hell of an imaginative BTB.

Welcome back, Mr. Donny. Please don't wait so long between stories next time.

That was a bit dark. (hehe) Falling through those portals for eternity.

needs a second chapter to where she survives and comes back

That was ugly.

Past the Dutchie on the left hand side. (Musical Youth)....I think we all smoke a bit too much if we start believing these things...Yeah Man!..Oh! Wow! Dude!..5 Stars ★ ★ ★ ★ ★ WOOF!

um that didnt make any sense. and i think this should be in scifi cat, but idk cant make much sense of this.

Now that is a way to deal with a cheating spouse, that I am sure has never been used before.

5/5

This is a REALLY different story.

The author's earlier submissions, "Just Cole and Jen", "In Jail", and "The Coolest Chick I Knew" all have a panache that deserved the 4-star and 5-star ratings they received.

Again, this story is different!

he was reborn, smarter than before emotionally.

that old adage, 'trust, but verify' is the real deal. no such thing as 'blind trust'

there's no reward for blind trust, and animals are wired to abuse it. no one respects it, even if people pretend to expect others give it to them.

i really liked that last scene. very well done.

Kind of a cold hearted ending... the punishment didn't fit the crime...

Kind of cold...the punishment didn't fit the crime.....,2 stars

This is real close to being a snuff story

A BTB to the Nth degree.

Fantasy put to words.

Unique

Should have been posted in Sci/fi and even there it would have been a worthless read.

1 star

Pretty cool.

But I would be curious for another chapter.

What if the calculations were just slightly off or there was a malfunction bringing her back to reality with no fall and she returned? Or if in the continual loop it creates enough force to send her in another dimension, changed her into something not human and she came back as a villian to earth that he had to battle?

Or if she's gone but you did dive into his life after. What happens to a "cold hearted" man who just happens to be the most powerful person in existence?

Your character criticizes Taylor's misuse of a pronoun, but Mr. Brilliant does it too, for example:

"Each and every one of them [this is singular, not plural] knew what Taylor was doing to me, and they [plural, with no plural antecedent, should be "she", but better if you had written "All of them", in which case the "they" would have been correct] either actively encouraged her behavior or turned a blind eye."

"The group [singular] was then shown the error of their [plural, with no plural antecedent, should be "its"] ways and the consequences of their [same as previous] moral failings."

Here's a math question...if you multiply one billion times one billion, how many zeros do you get? (bear in mind that there are nine zeros in one billion, i.e. 10 to the ninth power). As a hint, the answer is NOT 27.

I'm sure I have no idea what this was all about, but I'm not interested enough to go back and read it again.

These revenge stories are getting more sadistic as they come.

To all of you that are still smarting from a bad relationship and or marriage. Let it go. The anger and hate you feel for "her" is only eating you up. Its like she is still hurting you. Don't let her. Fantasies of bitch burning can only take you so far.

I let one get to me and can't see myself ever going down that dark road. I know how it feels. Never again. I know that if my wife betrayed me, it would hurt, but I can't let her break me. And neither should you.

Just walk away... move on and live your life.

To the police, to family, and to the world that your wife suddenly disappeared?

WTF

The end made this belong in Sci-Fi & Fantasy...2*

It reads like he is the dumbest man in the world. You don't have to be a genius to spot a selfish shameless promiscuous slut. He got what he married. I guess she did too. So they both deserved what they got.

Fun sci-fi fantasy - well done - might make a cool graphic novel.

I’m thrilled to see you back. I’ve enjoyed your stories in the past. “Just Cole and Jen” is one of my favorite Literotica (Mature) Romances.

Thanks much.

kinda an allegory for going to hell. I enjoyed the treatise, only about 2,000 or so people in the world understand string theory and the math behind it, so I am curious about you using it in this tale? Very entertaining, unique BTB story.

Remind me not to piss you off. Sir!

Try again. It could be really good

Same old plot🎭. Smart, socially inept, not - handsome, intellectual. Pairs up with a beautiful, sexy, selfish woman. He is shy and misunderstood. She is kind and loving.... Until she drops the hammer.

He wins due to an amazing invention‼️Gets revenge on everybody... The End ⛔

Have you ever been to LW before LittleDonny???

Thanks for the effort, better luck next time.

AMerryman

Saw your old stories. Okay, it seems like you are out of practice.

But you also seem to lose your characters as well. They completely change personality. At least you do that to the female antagonists. Then your plot skews, too.

Thanks again, LittleDonny...

AMerryman

I enjoyed the story, finding it quite inventive at times.

I think the brother got off too easy or perhaps

Needed more description of how broken he became

as he was removed from society

Someone as smart as Aaron could have had great revenge without resorting to murder. No score.

LittleDonnie has some deep mental issues. Hope you’re writing this from a galaxy far far away. I am afraid if we are on the same planet.

And the story was not erotic or interesting.

Stories about psychotic murderers just dont do it for me.

For those of you who are like blah blah murder... it's a story... it'll be ok.

Even if she did let her guard down at the end, she was only a gold digger and she was right, she had created a monster, and what he did was monstrous and left a bad taste in the mouth

5 stars

Just the way I like ‘em!

What a load of rubbish.Dont give up your day job.

How was it monsterous. She was a back stabbing bitch and no remorse at all. cant say i feel bad for her at all.

One evil cheating bitch against a very mad scientist couldn't possibly end well for her.

Now we are not only BTB in the stories a lot of authors get into murder!

And you readers applause to this? I thouht you are christiens. But it shows a lot about a community to read comments. No respect to life ,i feal pitty of you. How low is your life to applause to this.

Then went stupid. Murder is not btb. Landing her nude in the middle of a superbowl game is btb, having her poor and homeless is btb. Killing her like he did is sadism and strips any empathy for the cheater's victim.

You need to watch inconsistencies. Firstly everyone was using it all the time, destroying the need for vehicles. Then you tell us it was too expensive and only the mega rich could use it. Cannot be both.

I'm befuddled by the themes of this story. Cheating, sci-fi, megalomania, rampant mental and physical cruelty, I was never sure what one had to do with the other.

Suffice it to say that in the end we have a super human individual capable of literally destroy all humanity maybe even the planet.

What I couldn't reconcile was that Aaron the inventor of the technology that could destroy humanity was the only man magnanimous enough to manage it. Yet this same man devised and implemented a fate for his cheating spouse so diabolical that it staggers the imagination. To put her into an eternal cycle of near death experiences with no hope of peace in death is profoundly perverse. It is as though he had literally created a real Hell on earth for her.

A man with vengeance so deep seated in his psyche and in control of unimagined power bodes ill for mankind.

I find myself unable to rate the story.

I like my BTB's with at least the chance of being possible in real life. I don't have, and don't know anyone who has a portal.

Sorry. But wish I had a portal to unread this crock of ....glad I skimmed this

Still trying to unread this story...sick ending

I don't mind some over-the-top revenge stories, but this one just wasn't enjoyable at all.

End up caring more for Taylor than the protagonist, which is quite the feat.

WELL THAT WAS THE FOURTH STORY AND I THOUGHT IT WAS GREAT! THANKS LITTLE DONNY!

Lied to her to give her hope, then sent her to hell forever. Good Burn! Thanks

Why does this have such a low score? It’s one of the best BTB ever. He created eternal torment using science!

If she hated him as much as the "evil" reflected face suggested, then adios bitch! If not, then damn the bad luck!

this must be the stupidest shit ever. and the guy was still a fucking loser and a wimp till the very end.

What an imagination. Loved it.

What a pathetically inadequate jerk.

Endless karmic consequences without redemption or rebirth. (Vengeance is mine sayeth the Word?)

There’s huge flaw in this story page one he got signed but also signed away the patien so he wouldn’t be rich by any means

Although it’s a loving wife story I believe it should be in science fiction

What can I say? Mercy me, thank goodness this is only a story. You cold-hearted fiend.

Grim, and breathtaking in the taking of vengeance

There is not a great explanation of how this is eternal, because it takes a lot of power. Also, there needs to be more emphasis for clarity of WHAT cost so much that millionaires could only afford it twice, or so, yet everyone could emcube, and it killed most forms of transport. Then there was discussion of battery packs, but wifey was not wearing one when she went through, there is a lot that could be cleaned up.

Enjoyed the read, wish you were still posting. Sorry this response came out negatively.