Sounds Good Ch. 01

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I wasn't at all surprised when the next screen offered me a choice:

Watch the stove

Go to the bathroom door

I was familiar with the story of Alfred the Great and the oatcakes. I might have let Heather's risotto burn (and just reload and start over), except that I'd already seen Laura in the washroom. I suspected that it was the same picture I'd already seen.

There was nothing required of me after that. Heather returned, with the wine, checked the status of her risotto, and then thanked me - with a kiss on the cheek.

YOUR RELATIONSHIP WITH HEATHER HAS IMPROVED!

I was ... slightly disappointed. I mean, obviously I knew that. The actress playing Heather had made it clear enough, with her emphatic 'thank you'. Plus the kiss.

The scene in the kitchen continued, as Heather happily informed the roommates that I'd been the one to buy the wine, and he helped me cook!

At the first opportunity, I returned to my room, and checked the computer. Inventory ... there it was. Heather - Friend.

Interestingly enough, my relationship with Ronnie had also changed: from 'Complete Stranger' to 'Acquaintance'.

I saved, and then quit the game.

***

I didn't spend the whole evening thinking about the Apartment. Instead, I had a nice meal with Mom, and asked her something I'd always wanted to know.

- "Mom, did you date any guys before you met Dad?"

She gave me a long look.

- "You really want to know? Or is this just research for the dating game you're playing?"

Too smart. I knew a few people who complained that their parents were totally clueless. I had the opposite problem.

- "Not 'just', Mom. But ... both, really. You dated some guys? Before Dad?"

- "Of course I did."

- "Why didn't you marry them?"

- "I couldn't marry all of them, sweetheart. That's illegal." she said.

- "Mom ..."

- "Sorry, Daniel. I couldn't resist. Alright: what are you really asking me, here?"

- "I just ... how did you know if they liked you? Or ... if you liked them?"

- "Well, I was pretty sure if they asked me out, that they liked me. After that, I had to try to figure out if they just wanted to ... sex. If they just wanted sex. Or if they were genuinely interested in me."

- "How could you tell?"

- "You know how I can tell when you're not really listening to me?" she said. "Like when you're thinking about a computer game?"

- "Oh."

- "Exactly. Body language. Eye contact. There are hundreds of signals."

- "I understand." I said. "But how did ... the guy know, if you were interested in him?"

- "The same way. If he was paying attention. Women give off signals, too. Eye contact. Body language. Verbal clues."

- "Verbal clues?"

- "If you're interested in a girl, you'd better pay attention to what she says, too."

- "Thanks, Mom."

- "Anytime. Are you up to doing the dishes?"

***

I sent Mike an audio review. It was short, because I really only had two points to make.

"Loved the Heather kitchen scene. Clever, and fun. It reminded me of King Alfred the Great and the oatcakes. I enjoyed the whole scene, right up until you told me that 'My relationship with Heather has improved.'

I already knew that. Her voice, the lovely render of her leaning over to kiss my cheek ... the kiss itself.

Snogg's renders are fantastic. I can tell how a girl feels about me - about my character - by her facial expressions, and by her body language. A frown, a smile ... a big smile ...

If I'm still in doubt, I can go to the computerinventory, and check my status. The big notification was unnecessary, intrusive, and ... unwelcome.

You don't need them. The two best features - sorry, the three best features, are the beautiful renders, the quality of the voice acting, and the way the two of them work together."

***

I never told Mike - or Mom, for that matter - my real first impressions of the game. At least, not all of them.

The renders were spectacular. That much I'd already admitted.

It was no secret, either, that I found the voice acting exceptionally good. I liked the gameplay systems, the interactions, the quality of the writing ...

The game was already better than just about everything in my so-called 'real' life. Five girls who didn't actually exist were monopolizing my thoughts. And so were five women whose voices sounded almost too good to be true.

I had to get out more.

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oldtwitoldtwit29 days ago

Well this is a really different take on things, I'm still out about how good afternoon story it is, maybe if I was a gamer I would see it in another way

cma68cma687 months ago

The comment by Anonymous about the conflict of physio at 4:00 but Tristan playing the game until dinner is wrong. The game doesn't arrive until the next day.

As always, your stories are well written and intriguing. I can't wait to see how it develops.

Dreamdog519Dreamdog519about 1 year ago

I am curious where this is all leading. I gave you the benefit of the doubt on the rating. The opening is a little boring. He needs to come out of his shell.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

Plot error in first scene: One of the opening lines of dialogue is about physio at 4:00. Then he procedes to check out the game until dinner, blowing ff the physio.

Character development issue: You allude to his lack of strength/stamina, 'needing' to exercise, and the physio appt, (which allides to rehab, either an injury or a disability), but you fail to further explain the reason(s).

There's also his mom asking if he's up to doing things around the house, instead of just asking him to do something.

I kept expecting you to have some dialogue w- his mom, or his friend, or internal dialogue about his situation.

A rather glaring hole. in character development.

Richard1940Richard1940over 2 years ago

Please, pretty please, where can I buy a copy of this game?

Tonyusmc3051Tonyusmc3051about 3 years ago
Flashback

I play these types of games, so seeing this story from that point of view is amazing. I am now on your 4th story and I am convinced you are an actual writer. There is no way you can monopolize my time in four different stories if you are a beginning writer. If you can, you definitely need to start getting your stories published.

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
Hmmm

I don’t know where it’s going, but I love the novel beginning and your writing is great. Got a five from me.

SirColin77SirColin77about 4 years ago
Everyone’s a little bit

An oriental girl. I refer you to Avenue Q. Ha!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 4 years ago
Second time around

ok so I've stumbled on this story for the second time now. And remember how it's ending and following it through again and loving it all the way, again. And not because I'm bored, it's just to make sure I didn't miss anything the first time around. It's that good!

illwindillwindover 4 years ago

Not to be too harsh, but this truly might be the most boring piece of writing I've ever come across on this site. I kept waiting for...something. Is he gonna get sucked into the game? Are the characters gonna come to life? Nope. It apparently really is just gonna be a story about this depressing guy playing an even more depressing game. But not only is he gonna play it, he's gonna play the same parts FIVE TIMES. Can't believe I'm saying this, but I think I would actually prefer playing a dating sim to reading this.

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