All Comments on 'Spark & Stone - Ch. 20'

It is starting to get boring, it's going too slow and the chapters are too short.

Story is very good, but getting boring without having these two getting no where....chapters too short.

I love the pace and build up of your stories, i love getting to know the characters and their foibles and quirks. Thank you for sharing your stories with us. X

Nah, I can’t agree. You’ve been steady with updates and I love the slow dynamic between these two. I feel like you’re doing a nice job of showing their emotional growth/increasing self-awareness and how that affects their evolving wants and needs together. Keep up the great writing!

Just as a general rule when you’re writing, if you’re starting to repeat yourself (the push-pull between Heath and Aiden is starting to be repetitive) then it’s time to move forward with the plot. Also, you have ask yourself would Aiden really be so dense and naive and low self esteemed that 19 chapters in, he’s still questioning whether Heath really likes him? Even after Heath has said it multiple times? It doesn’t gel with his character to be so focused and determined and reasonably confident and self assured at work (and even when interacting with Heath), but sooo massively down on himself. I’d expect such a low self esteem only from someone who has abuse in their history.

I like this story a lot! Wondering if our little bunny would ever get to stick it up Heath's butt. That would be a perfect way for the fitness guru to show he really feels different towards Aidan than with other guys.

Keep 'em coming!