by Sabledrake
I'm not sure whether to be freaked out or turned on. A bit of both, really. Very moving, and exquisitely romantic in a very unusual way. I especially enjoyed the second-person narration. A clever touch, that.
And death will separate them, and bind them in ways that are too strange for any to know. Only true love will pass the barriers of that world
This was very well written, moving to the climax. A romantic horror story is almost unique.
I could see this as a poem, even, especially with the cadence. Interesting plot. Nice work.
Very original and well written. I think you would like one of my contest entries Who Killed Lois Laynes? (in the New Section) You appear to have enough smarts to solve this Literotica murder mystery. Good luck!
SD, if I hadn't already given you a five, I would give you and extra point for this:
"Little ghosts and ghouls laughing in the night, a night often cold with the early dark of autumn. Clouds scudding like pale wraiths across the black, a moon sallow and bloated as the face of a corpse."
Well done story with a nice twist. Keep up the good work.
Rumple Foreskin
Christopher Walkin's character on Saturday Night Live. Oh well...
This one was challenging to write, but I think it turned out prety good. Thanks for the feedback!
A nice surprise at the end. I liked the perspective too.
Good luck.
Creative concept...Interesting twist...Flowed like a river till the water fall!!! (~_*) Happy Halloween--Good Luck!
Wow this was great! I was in suspense the entire time. I hope this is chapter 1 and we will find out what happenened in future chapters!