All Comments on 'Split Second Thoughts'

This was a decent premise and some good scenes, but I think you should get an editor to help your next story. Grammar was pretty rough. Looking forward to your next story. Heck, if you ever want to write a sequel to this story, I'd be down.

This was a great story. I think chapter 2 should be a threesome. After all, the cat is out of the bag.

Very good story! To my knowledge plausible plot line, no duplication.

Only one negative comment though, the internal dialogue of Katie, Debby and Jimmy enclosed in double quote (") was distracting since actual verbal dialogue between them were also in double quote ("). In my humble opinion, why not use a single quote (') or even just italic type to indicate internal dialogue?

This was great. I'd love to see a sequel.

FANTASTIC STORY?????

Great story, but the twins are going to realize he knew all along because Katie's pussy is shaved.

So I look forward to the realization in chapter 2 and maybe the ensuing incestuous three way.

chapter 2 [mom and aunt] please

Encore! 5*

Overall, fantastic story. Hot, flowed well, really great. I did think the ending fell a bit flat, but it was so great before that that I will still give you 5 stars.

Needs a trained proofreader. Too many errors that were not caught.

Well if you are going to ruin a very good marriage then you might as well ruin it in style.

Shouldn’t be too long before Jim finds out about this and divorces his wife. Then it’s only a matter of disowning his kid.

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I would love a follow up! 5*

However, you should use different symbols to indicate thoughts and things people actually say out loud. It was a little confusing at the beginning.

loved it! Please write the next part!

The storyline was fun.

Probably somewhat life like for some twins, and likely as in real life the shit hits the fan !

After a while the repetitive sex action got to be too much, so I skimmed over much of pages 4 & 5.

This author should really find a proofreader as there are plenty of repetitive Faux Pas's.

But it is Erotica !

Amazing

The sex kitten is out of the cage now. The women need to have a three-way with Jimmy before Jim finds out.

Wow! Great stories! Some of these comments about needing a proof reader or "Faux Pas" need to chill and relax. The story flowed and it made sense. Keep up the great work!

Please don’t disappear again. You are still an amazing writer and I am looking forward to seeing more of your work.

I have to be totally honest and admit that I couldn't even finish the first page. I enjoy the trope of twins switching places. I grew up watching the Patty Duke reruns where she played both parts of identical cousins (unbelievable in itself) and I really enjoyed that show. But when you got to the Aunt/Nephew incest, my interest waned. I'm glad that you didn't try to convince us that Little Jimmy couldn't tell his mother and aunt apart, because that's just ludicrous. But having him pretend that he had them mixed up during lunch was the final straw for me. I stopped reading and skipped to the end. 1/5

One of the best stories I've read in a long time! Thanks! Oh, and to the guy who couldn't read past the first page because Jimmy "pretended" to not be able to tell them apart.....you're an idiot! That was the whole setup for the entire story! Without that little tidbit, the rest of the story couldn't have played out properly. This is a great story and it checks all the boxes! Keep up the good writing!

Holy shit! What a hot fucking story! Please write more!

It's a great set up! Everything fell into place and the story made a lot of sense. The only thing missing is a follow up and a second part! Please write more!

At first I thought Katie would join in, but the cliff hanger made it even better! Great job! Please continue this story!

Holy Cow! This story had almost everything! The set up was great, so much detailed. I would have changed it, or at least made it so Katie would have joined somehow. Please give us another chapter!

I hope there are more chapters!!!

I want a continuation of the trx threesome Jimmy and mom and aunt family incest! please write

One of my favorite stories! The set up really laid it out! Please write more!

Holy cow! This just moved to the top of my favorite story list! Please write another chapter!

LOVED the cliff hanger at the end! Cannot wait for another chapter! Please don't make us wait too long!

Well written, well developed, well done!

Of all the mother/son stories I read, this has to be at the upper end of the list! Wow! this was fucking HOT! Anxiously waiting for part two!

There has GOT to be a part two! Hot Hot Hot! Also, love your writing style!

I keep coming back to this story, and still LOVE IT! Please continue with another chapter!

Well done! Nicely written! Outside of a few typos, good flow and execution. Hopefully, chapter 2 will come soon as well!

LOVE LOVE LOVE this story! PLEASE have a part two!