All Comments on 'Spoiling my Daughter Ch. 01'

Great story. Perhaps do a reread so you can fix the typos.

5 Stars.....please write more.

Pretty good but you need a proof reader.

very good.......makes me wish i had girls.

Your story was amazing. It is erotic, and it takes your audience on an adventure. However, I strongly recommend using Grammarly for this type of writing. Your readers will be impressed, and your writing will be concise.

Again, I think your story was amazing. Should we hope for a part 4?

Very good story, well written, but the ending felt a little weak

Solid story! Ended too abruptly. Wish you told us more if Amber was shaved or not down there

Please get an editor. Way too many words misspelled.

Waiting for chapter 2.

You don't wear down a hymen to prepare for sex. The hymen is not supposed to break. Don't have your character saying "I have to hand it to her she did her research" when you're not even writing correct facts.

Despite the grammar errors this was a good start of a story. If you ever revisit this story and continue it, maybe have more dirty talk and be a bit more graphic, like the daughter running the tip of her tongue outlining every muscle of her daddy's fit abs, taking her time to lick and suck every inch of daddy's sexy body as she works her way down to his cock..it would be nice if there is a chapter where she comes home for a school break and notices daddy disappears from time to time. She follows him one day and sees that he has been keeping himself busy while she's been away with the young hottie from the toy store. She gets jealous of the attention and affection they show each other. She eventually realizes that she is in love with daddy and craves to have his baby. Daddy-daughter babies are so hot

I really liked this story plot. It was funny and loving, sexy and erotic.

Loved the storyline, but the next time you write a story send it to one of the Literotica editors. WAY too many misspelled words and punctuation errors.