All Comments on 'Spring Break Ch. 01'

Great Story! I really liked the way you made the threesome come together; it was very believable and emotionally consistent. I also liked that they were aware that this could have unplanned consequences ("what bridges we still have left to cross and which ones we've burned")

With a tilte including CH. 01 and all those clues, - I am looking forward to the rest.....

I second the comment. Very well done!

Wonderful story! Very well written and good flow. Keep going, we want to read more of this wonderful story.

Keep going. Please.

Please continue!!

Very erotic, but i think you should add asslicking (a lot)between girls.

Thank you.

I like where this is going...the relationship between the two girls is very interesting...what a lucky guy! I can't wait to see where it goes.

Indeed! He is one lucky guy, and I can't wait to read the rest of the chapters.

Great story! You write very well, and I love the playful tone and the balanced mixture of foreplay, oral, and intercourse. If there is room for improvement, it is only that the story had perhaps too MANY climaxes and not enough tease/buildup. But this one is defintely going on my favorites!

You are an incredible writer. If you are not doing so already, this talent will take you very far. Please persue it further, so I will continue to have somthing to read that I fully enjoy.

I loved that the women were curvy - always nice! Hmm, the story was believable, the dialogue flowed well, I found a few gramatical and spelling errors but not enough to take away from the plot. My only suggestion is to be more descriptive about the sex scenes and try to be more creative with analogies and similies. The main character was very charming. I will definitely read your other stories. Keep writing!

Printed your spring break. My wife got so hot reading it on the beach, one touch and she was over the top... HOT!

5 stars for this and 6 i could.

This series of stories is very well written, has good character development and a compelling story line. Bravo!!!

I love the quote about massage. I feel the same way

Loving this. Cannot wait to dive into chapter 2. Next time I visit Anaheim, I might just have to find out if the Haunted Mansion Rider club exists! Can't decide which girl I like better for our guy. Perhaps both will just have to always be available for him. And Katie and Carl and soon to find themselves involved, I love the clues you set up for us.

Until ch. 02,

Scarlet Butler ;-)

interplay and sex is so hot; even see the possibility that Carl is on his wat out & tht Katie is curious.

My only concern; I still don't know the lead guys name, and I've gone back and forth a few times to find it!!

OMG but I'm so jealous and wish that that was me with the 2 girls, sighs

DKP

VERY INTENSE I REALLY THINK MELINDA WANTS MORE THAN A FUCK BUDDY BUT LEAH THE WAY THEY MADE LOVE AND THE FEELINGS THEY HAVE FOR EACH OTHER TELLS ME SHE HAS THE INSIDE TRACK AND I THINK THAT MELINDA KNOWS IT. KATIE I AM NOT SURE OF BUT FROM WHAT I HAVE READ ABOUT HER BOYFRIEND(CARL) AND HER SQUEEZING ON THE OTHERS GUY THEIGH HE SEEMS TO BE ON HIS WAY OUT. 5 STARS GOOD SO FAR. I USUALLY DONT READ THE GROUP SEX STORIES.

RON TEXAS------cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

I've always loved this series and i always come back to it for a f=beautiful and heartfelt read.

I meant to highlight 5 stars, going left to right. I now know better. It's a helluva good tale. Can't wait to read the next.

Mike Anonymous

So fucking hot!! I can't wait to read the other chapters! Five plus stars!!

Excellent!

A great start to what promises to be a well thought out and written story. I look forward to reading the next chapter. As this is my first foray into your writing and the first story you posted here I have added you to my favorites list. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination (memories?) and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.

This first chapter has been awesome.