All Comments on 'Spring Break: Sex on the Beach'

Naughty girl, nicely written. Love that she gets to indulge her Bi side too at the end. But if I may, have someone proof read, 4 stars but a couple of places hard to read. My daughter has helped me with my stories.

This story was well written and hot. But the thing with a cheating kink is that you are the only one that can get your need fulfilled while destroying other people's lives. That kink cannot be satisfied with a cuck, he is letting you have sex with other guys, it does not fulfill that, but damn it is hot getting it from someone else's man, need. Such a shitty and selfish desire to fulfill. You can get off a hundred different ways but because it does not scratch that itch and it hits just that tiny bit extra you bang the taken dude and ruin multiple peoples lives.

****This was a hot one!!! Good storytelling better sex. And now for part 2 ( The Five Cummings) Thanks for sharing,

Thank you all for the feedback!!!

@Naughtyandy4u your daughter reads your sex stories? I hope she is a stepdaughter lol. I dont know if I am going to be doing this seriously enough to need an editor but I'll look into it.

@Drgnmstr97 It really is bad lol. When i was younger something happened to me, and girls being girls I got picked on allot and called a dumb slut by girls at my school, so I always liked stealing their men back. Call me a slut Ill be a slut kind of thing. But that turned into a bad habit and kink I kept falling into until marriage. And now as a wife, I get it. But I still look back and remember how fun it was to be that shitty. But youre only a housebreaker when you get caught! I used to joke what I did was a public service, I suck dicks so wives dont have to...

@chytown Thank you! I don't know if ill really do a part 2 that ending isn't really based on anything I just thought it was a wicked ending lol.

Very good plot here. The story line is excellent and just about the perfect length. I only gave it four stars due to some pretty bad grammar and spelling at certain points. Oh, and having a lady think that not enough sex is unhealthy is just the kind of advice we all need!

Wow. None of your “rave reviews” even noticed your outstanding narrative voice. The sex was merely incidental. What you revealed about your first person narrator was so deeply informative that it made me want to know her so much more. That’s the trick: Always leave them wanting more.

You’ve got chops, kid. Major chops.

Keep writing.

Oh, and as a former writing teacher: FUCK THE GRAMMAR/APELLING NAZIS. Editors can smooth over that shit. What counts is narrative talent.

Hone it.

@rapierwit24601 I love you ❤️😂

I agree with others here. Great story. Loved your voice. Excited to read what you post next.

👍👍!

This was hot enough to make me really hard, written clearly and truthfully enough to paint a perfect picture of her/your encounter. I'm looking forward to more.

~B

A great story which felt very real

I agree with the other comments as the story is well written. It is erotic and sensual. I am looking forward to your next story.