All Comments on 'Stacy Comes To Visit Me'

So you have been hot to trot for her since she was 13 years old? "Lusted after her for 12 years"

need to attend creative writing classes.

You keep changing from past to present tense; sometimes in the same sentense. Very hard to read. For this type story you should always use past tense...

I don't normally leave comments but this is something I have been seeing a lot lately..when a person has a shivering sensation, they are "shuddering"..."shutters" are wooden flaps that close over windows from the outside.

My girlfriend is 5-3 & 110 lb, with a lean ballerina's figure, and a full a/small b cup.

If your character is a full c cup, she is too damned skinny.

All good until the final couple of sentences where she revealed herself to be a common whore. Should have left that out