All Comments on 'Star Trek: Lineage Ch. 02'

I think you should find additional venues for these stories (FFdN has suddenly cracked down on anything too... biological... but I'm sure there are other good sites out there), because they are fantastic even absent the erotica scenes. One huge historical nitpick though; the Bajoran wormhole (referenced in a convo between Casana and her supervisor) won't be discovered for about another 76 years.

Good catch. There is actually another continuity error in this chapter that I only noticed after submitting the story. In one segment, the crew quarters moved down two decks from deck 5 to deck 7 for no apparent reason. Oops.

I'm a hardcore Trekkie. Looking forward to finishing your series. I'm also familiar with continuity problems, especially in stories that take me a while to finish. I once started a story with my protagonist living in an apartment and ended it with him living in a tract house with a pool. Embarrassing!

I don't care about minor typo's, there/their/they're errors etc, but some errors can make me laugh or say "Oh, come on!" in such a way that it breaks the flow of the story. Those are "must-fix" in my opinion.

"They took the Matter and Antimatter Injector Ports and shit down the warp core."

(Everybody knows, warp cores go offline if they're shit into by Klingons.)

"Kahn?" Fuller nodded.

(Khan is the most iconic villain Kirk ever faced. Spell his name right, please!)

Keep on writing! I'll read everything you post.