All Comments on 'Starchaser Ch. 01: The Beginning'

Good premise, and I like where this is going. My only criticism is that it is often difficult to tell which parts of the story belong to which character. In future episodes, please do something to make the switch from one POV to another more obvious.

I, um, uh, somehow thought this was an established story line and I could just click on the next chapter. I am hoping that this is not a one-off. Please take your time but please continue. Thanks for a great introduction.

I'm sorry I couldn't get past the first switch in character.

This would be a solid 5, if I could spend all of my time enjoying the story, instead of who is talking.

What do you think of this story rewrite? The first 4 comments were well received and served as motivation for the rewrite to make clear which voice was being used for each section. Additionally more detailed information was added to round out the story and provide greater depth to the backstory and broaden character development.

This rewrite is nicely done! Looking forward to more of this story.