All Comments on 'Starcrossed Ch. 002'

I loved doing this with you and I love where you taking it. I guess to make a story from a RP you have to change things. It can be a bit strange to read it otherwise. And I must point out to the others who is reading that it will get A LOT better. I really hope you don't take out all bloody parts.=). Keep up the good work and again...I love it.

Looking forward to seeing this develop more and now am intrigued,,,,

I love the way this story is beginning. I will say I had a slight tickle at the idea of an "impenetrable tent," with no explanation of such a thing might work. But then, this is your world and I'm thoroughly enjoying my visit. Looking forward to more--this has the feel of being a major epic in the making.

There are so many grammatical mistakes in this series! Please tell your editor not to rush as the errors are ruining your story.

ally - alley, strait - straight?! I think both of you are like Rom and can't read. I give up.