All Comments on 'Station Helio Ch. 00 Prologue'

Very great start but you need to write a second half to this! Please!!

As an interesting piece of science fiction this story is promising and I look forward to seeing how it progresses. However, a huge chunk of the story is implausible. Even in a far-flung future, any military commander in a war zone who allows their soldiers to have an orgy and then all go to sleep at the same time without setting sentries would be guilty of gross dereliction of duty and should be court-martialled. This would seem to apply especially to a commander like Ashe who supposedly has the powers of a seer and can foretell what the enemy is likely to do.