by Annie Morgan
Annie, this is a wonderful story with great description, nice theme. Very well done. I was amazed to find this to be your first submission! Of course you MUST write more!
Please continue to write. This story was very visual in my mind as I read it. Ibelieve it was excellent for your first story. Thanks, "Darkmagnet"
Annie,
Great job on the story. I love the way you use
descriptives throughout. I think it was most
excellent! A+++ Keep up the good work.
crymorphine
OMG the visual thoughts in MY mind as I read it were crystal clear. Want to read MORE
Thought this was great, especially considering how much time I myself spend in the gym ;-) Keep it up.
-Charlie
Well written, throughout the story I was there watching over her shoulder. Extremly good, please give us more.
A beautiful mind with beautiful fantasies
Knightmare
Wow...this was so hot. I would love to read more of your stuff, Annie. You really are a talented writer.
Well written with great visualizations. It was easy to imagine being there. Very erotic.
A woman that knows what she wants, when and where. The pacing of the story expands inside the mind with the great visuals. I could feel her hunger and I suspect that if he did not come to her, she would have gone to him. She is doubly blessed. A bold woman. Oh, how I envy her electric boyfriend.