All Comments on 'Stella'

There are 9 pages to this story.

There only needs to be 5.

Halfway down page 5, the whole thing repeats.

Easy 5 stars with very much appreciated subtle sex descriptions.

But it is double posted so you might want to edit / repost it to get rid of the second copy.

I hope you have some thoughts about a couple of follow up stories as I think you have done a great job of laying the groundwork for a bunch of different things that can happen between these two lovers.

Same story told twice...wish you wouldn't have waisted the extra pages and continued the story a bit farther.

Very Hot. I would like to see more with these two, and I don't mean double posting the same story, LOL. It would be cool if they eventually become a couple or marry after seeing each other for a while. Hopefully Stella's parents would be ok with it once they got over their surprise.

Really enjoyed this story and looking forward to Part 2!

As noted by others, the story repeats.

Also, your early mention of the other shoe dropping is entirely the wrong phrase/metaphor/simile... whatever.

I really love the story, it was very hot! Can't wait for a sequel!

It would be really great if you went back and finished Santa Barbara. Your character development there was absolutely perfect and incredibly away erotic.

So many questions and so many options, plus their making love later that day would've been incredible. It's my favorite of all of your stories!

Thanks for your beautiful writing.

Very enjoyable.

"I said my goodbyes, took my leave and my thoughts rapidly turned to what lay in wait for me up in Mouth Kisco."

"Mouth" [?} Kisco???? The train conductor called it Mount Kisco.

Is that a typo, or some sort of double entendre.

Also, the word "waiver" was used when "waver" is what was intended.

Don't proofread your own work; that's why these kinds of mistakes get overlooked.

"...and I knew this was the right tact."

Tack. Or tactic. MOST DEFINITELY NOT TACT. No tact was demonstrated while he was fucking his best friend's daughter in her parents' bed, at least part of his mind imagining it might be her mother instead of the daughter.

Get someone else to proofread your work, if you're going to make such egregious vocabulary errors.