by safire711
Pretty much lost interest at the 11 inch part. To me some semblance of realism is nice. Get with an Editor to help smooth out rough spots. You published something which to me is a plus.
2 stars for effort
Damn this made me hard as a rock. It was sexy and slutty and dirty just the way I like it. Could use some proper editing but other than that, it was very naughty. Keep it up and you'll be getting plenty of 4 and 5 star ratings. A little bit of advice, I look up different pornstars and make notes of their bodily features and sizes so that when I put it into a story, my sizes arnt out of proportion too much if any. See how that works for you, if you want. Now I'm going to read your next entry in this series.
This story is great I had an orgasm before I even finished the story
I ready enjoyed it. I have a stepdad and I want him to treat me this way.