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AnonymousAnonymousabout 7 years ago

Really good so far hoping for more chapters

AnonymousAnonymousabout 16 years ago
Nice

Pretty good. I like the anticipatory aspect of the girl hearing cars but not knowing if it's her friends coming over. Try to keep an eye on your grammar though (precedent vs. precedence). It pulls the reader out of the moment.

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