All Comments on 'Step Mother's Advice-Undermine'

The time-line was all over the place and was hard for me to follow. Some direction of when each session was occurring would have been nice. The ending didn't wrap much of anything up.

This may have been clear in the author's mind, but the way it was written, the timeline jumped around, Pulp Fiction?, and even the titles don't make anything clear. Ben keeps talking about how it's complicated, that is exactly what this story has become. I don't have to be told everything for an ending, I wanted to like this story, but the way this story unfolded and ended left me confused and more things unanswered then complete.

The time/character shifts resulted in too much repeated dialogue and plot advancement. 4* overall.

This cannot be the end!!!! Way too many loose ends to tie up. This needs a better ending.

Amazing twists and intrigue, like a surprise at every turn. Ben's coming of age arranged by a slew of luscious women. I followed it intently but the changes in narrator did not phase me. One clue: The past tense of grind is ground.

Timeline was way too all over the place. Whole sections told twice. Not even sure where the ending was or if this was even a complete story. What about Brittany? What happens to Sharon?

Great story,. The non-linear timeline was confusing at first but then I got it. You ended the story too early as it has potential to be much longer as there are many loose ends and questions to be answered.

Amazing and well written trilogy. Would love to hear more exploits about Sharon, Cynthia and Angela. Well described and very erotic.

Too many jumps / gaps

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