by MeredithEighty8
So sad. She was so vulnerable and easy to intimidate. She had nothing else but all these entitled sorry sacks around her and nowhere to go to get away from them. I think being submissive is different from being cowed, and while beautifully written, I found nothing sexy in this story. Helplessness. That’s what I felt…her helplessness and loneliness.
Love the parts where Beth was submssive. Talking dirty is a super turn on. I think had I been there with them....I would have sucked either man to orgasm. Love sucking and being submissive myself. All well written.
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The anonymous dbag who left that comment below clearly cannot comprehend what he/she reads. This story was by far one of the best I have ever read on this site. Sex is hard to write about and often writers get tacky or corny in their descriptions. Yes there were a few small edits that needed to be made however nothing that made me question your mastery of story telling.
I practically never leave comments but I needed to let you know thiis: I never finish a story after I get myself off, I finished this one because I enjoyed It. Thank you Meredith
The anonymous dbag who left that comment below clearly cannot comprehend what he/she reads. This story was by far one of the best I have ever read on this site. Sex is hard to write about and often writers get tacky or corny in their descriptions. Yes there were a few small edits that needed to be made however nothing that made me question your mastery of story telling.
I practically never leave comments but I needed to let you know thiis: I never finish a story after I get myself off, I finished this one because I enjoyed It. Thank you Meredith!
When the characters have the combined IQ of a pea it doesn't help the story. They seemed to do some pretty implausible things. Also, you need some editing help. Not that the mistakes were terrible, they were just irritating and disrupted what little flow the story had.
Goldenpalomino,
Thank you for taking the time to post your comments. So glad you enjoyed the story.
I love how Beth and Brent come together:
"Before I could recover from my first orgasm, I was torn apart by the most exquisite orgasm I had ever experienced. I didn't care anymore, I cried as my body convulsed on his huge dick buried inside my tight, warm pussy hole, my trembling body pressed tightly to him. Brent finally surrendered to his orgasm. . . "
Such an arousing description of Mark getting sucked off, almost, by Beth!
"He resumed thrusting in and out until with one last, hard thrust he tore through my virginity." I'm only this far, and it is so, so good! I love Bethy!
I wish Beth was my step-daughter! Well written and paced. So arousing! Thank you!