by GirlintheMoon
She is fucked up and perhaps he will feel some guilt at his actions. Not likely, though, he'll just pump her and then dump her because no matter what? She's used goods and is better off with a bullet in the head than this twisted soul she's become.
I'll do it myself.
He should have tied her to the bed and tortured her. He should humiliate her, fuck her face, slap her breasts, anything he can think of that will inflict pain on her. But don't touch her cunt-- make her beg for it. Then he should charge her dad for the treatment :p
I love how it turned out. That kinky kind of attraction is the best, especially when there's a rough but gentle type. :)
Great story. Superbly written. Too bad the site limits me to five stars.
Your characters have enormous depth & warmth, in fact they seem tangible & real. Your writing is of a quality not often found on this site. You could give E.L.James a run for her money. I enjoy your writing much more than hers, I think you are a better writer. Thank you for creating sexy, intelligent stories that are gripping & fascinating. Please keep them coming.
This was a gem; I liked it a lot. You have an authentic voice as a writer.
Great job, really well written, but I only wish it was a bit longer. Maybe a sequel ? Thanks again (:
it was hilarious ! Gotta love it when a story's funny and sexy ! Keep it up !
I only read this because I noticed HDK has you as a favorite. I don't know if I've read of your other stuff, but I certainly will now.
A classic case of 'Bad Boy Syndrome ', it seems. Short & sweet.
I hope she knows what she seeks.
He gives what she needs.
This isn't the genre that I usually come to. But then, I'm simply following 'The Moon'.:-)
'The 5 Star Syndrome', that's what I've been diagnosed with. :-)
Thanks for sharing.
This is so wonderfully written! A very unique story in this category :) Please, please, please write a sequel; I love how unwilling the captor and I've never read that before!
...used to craft a taut little story that packs a punch. A great example of a well-written 1st person POV. What she wants isn't politically correct and she knows it, but craves it anyway. Hell, it probably contributes to her arousal. A hot, quick mindfuck. Bravo.
You are a gifted writer and should submit your stories for publication (but don't stop your Literotica submissions!)
Very well written - would love you to write more stories like this !!
Is it weird that I think of Eva Green while reading this? Your style of writing is really beautiful it makes you feel like you're watching it and you can easily "be the character", very well done.
This is one of my favorite GirlintheMoon stories. So compact, so well crafted, and so hot!