All Comments on 'Strangers on a Train Ch. 01'

"(I)t was obvious that she was confidant and sexy..."

She may be a confidant, but she's not confidant. I've quite confident of that.

Are these such things as square leggings?

"Her whimpers acted as pleads for me to enter her." WHAT?

This is somewhat of a fun tale but needs some improvement.

Good luck and keep after it.

I have always been nice to strangers; however,

not to this same effect!

Exquisite language level...Thanks!

(Although I do prefer TOWARD without an S.)

Do you sit with a dictionary and try to find these " 50 cent words" to clutter up the story and make it hard.

They are like speed bumps that "trip up" the flow of the story. Way too many adjectives.

" I pulled my New York times broadsheet from my camel tan attache and fashioned it into a makeshift

barrier to shield myself from the elements"

I held a newspaper over my head would work just fine.

Damn, I probably had to read three or four times more words than needed just to get to the story.

Apoplectic, licentious, permutations and on and on it goes. Kills the story for me.

Very much disagree with the 'too many words' comment: details are fun & enjoyable and add character to stories. Naming the newspaper gives us an idea of the type of person we are reading about, and creates buildup.