All Comments on 'Strictly Business Ch. 02'

cliffhangers are a pain.good story.

Nice ending to your story.

Boyd

I told you I would apologize and I will. There was no neck snapping horseshit in this part and no stupid revenge stuff. Well done. Two suggestions: Maybe this could have gone into the romance category, although I really don't care which category one puts his stories to tell you the truth. And the Navy SEAL stuff is a bit overboard.

I noticed that none of the evangelicals bothered commenting on this story when they found there was no revenge plot in part two. It's what they love to see but writing to please them (which some do you didn't) is always a mistake. It takes away from what you really want to write.

A very good read. I hope to see more of your stories in the near future.

muchg ado about nothing

A feel good story,which is a rarity in these cynical times.Welcome to a new very promising author.

What a pleasant surprise, such a feel good story. This is what the Loving Wife section should be all about.

I thank your writing is good and your plot was different enough. That is hard to do.

Thank you for your hard work and sharing your talent.

PT

I thought she was betraying him,but only about Ron's surprise .Very good writing. Can't wait to read more of your stuff.With high regards, Luis

A bit contrived here and there, but what story isn't?

Can someone tell me why Holly had to go up and get fetch Ron's new love from behind a door? She couldn't find her own way thru a door?

And, we really could have stood the pressure of reading the whole page and a half in one session.

But a good start.

You might also consider replying to those who send you private comments and include their email addresses - just a thought.

Excellent story. The plot was original---at least to me. A nice ending.

It is a pleasure to come across a story of this quality.

eating away at a relationship.

This was well done with a good understanding of relationships.

Regards, DJ

Sure, it's got a whacky plot but LYG tells the story in grand style and makes us enjoy the characters, liking them for the foibles as well as their strengths. Thank you for a story well-told.

and unlike some others I have held of comments until it was finished.The story was well written and well thought out, and I enjoyed it very much.I had a little laugh in part one when Ron said that Holly would not give up the baby because she had been brought up in a strictly moral family.Did not stop her going of with her married boss and getting pregnant though did it?

and good writing as well. I love it. Thanks.

Nice job buddy, really well done. --- To answer someones question: The trip across the stage was a T-E-N-S-I-O-N builder. Worked pretty well too, huh?

Loved the story so don't get me wrong. It takes two to tango and Holly knew Ron was married when she committed adultery with him. So once a cheater always a cheater. Given time and opportunity she will do it again. But don't feel sorry for Rob when I happens after all he was involved with the cover up.

With respect to Tears of Sorrow's comment, I am first a bit skeptical of the proof of the " once a cheater always a cheater" proposition. Is it 50% correct, 95%,99,99%? Nothing is that absolute in my experience! Especially in human relations... Furthermore, if she was a cheating spouse it would carry much more weight with me. But as a fairly innocent maiden, come on! She does not have that feel about her! rob knew what he was doing, except he should have mentioned his love earlier!

I can truly say that I haven't read another story that even comes close to being similar. I would have liked a little more fluff about the family life after they recommitted themselves which would have included a brother or sister for Marie. What can I say, I'm a romantic at heart. Great Story, Thanks LYG

Don't have much to say about this story. It is well written and a story that has something behind it. It is not just a story that has honor and class in that he is willing to sacrifice his single lifestyle to help out a friend, it also shows the class that a young woman can actually show a bit of class (and honor) by not blackmailing the boss. One other thing that puts this story at the top, it has a happy ending, something becoming very rare in many of the stories written recently...also I am a sucker for a happy ending.

You did a great job in writing this story. It is more of the kind of story that I like more than all of the fucking and sucking stories that you find on Leroticca. It had a great ending and you made it a great story by giving it such a great ending. Thank you.

This story is not super, but hyper, Hyper, HYPER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

74000 years ago, when the supervulcano Toba erupted, the Homo Sapiens Sapiens remain only 500 persons only in Africa. It was important to survive the climate catastropha in the early paleolit. It was very important for the mankind, that the male are able to help to grow up a not genetical relative children to adult to save the Homo Sapiens Sapiens subspecies. Yes not the love alone but the affection and fondness became an evolutionary advantage. I hope this evolutionary advantage remains forever at the Homo Sapiens Sapiens species.

After sifting thru excrement you rarely find a diamond. This is one of those times. It makes me think that an Author of this caliber should not be publishing on this site. It only shows all other writers what they are lacking and how high they have to aim just to be on the same level.

Superbly written,thank you.

We are human being and some people can learn his/her mistake. Yes it is also true not every people can learn from the mistake. A cheater is cheater American way of saying is true for the serial cheaters as a lonely single woman who got a child from a unthinkable connection. This story is in my favorite collection and it will remain there.

she did go around fucking his friend, she stayed true to her husband. nice story 5*s

I suggest this type stories the TLW abreviation = TRUE LOVING WIFE stories. I hope the reader fellows will aprove this term.

It was frustrating most of the way in the insecurity of the male and the ways the author kept communication from happening, as if in LW stories everyone goes around talking to themselves but never to each other. Hard to reconcile everything in the last few paragraphs.

Don't give up your day job. What trite, banal crap

take your friggin meds!

@ Harry (1) The most things can be shown by the Gauss curve or normal distrobution and the human behavioral may be approached similar way.

I divided the 10 sentences of my answer to Harry In Va in distict 10 stories.

1. Sentence leapyearguy „Strickly Business Ch. 02”

2. Sentence ohio „Visiting Richard Gronier”

3. Sentence DGHear „Another Chance”

4. Sentence K.K. „Flight Delay”

5. Sentence lucsmith „Let the Punishment Fit the Crime”

6. Sentence the Troubador „Wife Get Even”

7. Sentence FrancisMacomber „The Stairway to Haeven”

8. Sentence StangStar06 „Divorce and Future”

9. Sentence cpete „Blood from a Turnip”

10. Sentence Vulcez „How Are You”

I was afraid it was going the other way l love happy endings.

It did seem like you had built towards this and it would have been formulaic to have her leave him so i am glad you did it the way you did -

It is interesting that Ron could have met someone new etc without him knowing it but you left hat way - so be it.

A wonderful storyline that I wished you had more fully developed. A little more development of the Holly character would have given the story more emotionally punch. We really don't get a glimpse of who she really is until the very end.

You had your main character asking the one question I was asking: "Why not just ask her or Ron? Wouldn't that make more sense?" How cold they have never discussed this issue after the marriage? Again, this added to the lack of depth early on.

Good writing. Five stars.

There has to be a backstory that would explain why this man has so low a self-esteem that he expects his boss, to whom he had given nothing but loyalty and support would betray him callously, and his wife would collude in it and sever him from the child he had raised with love and kindness.

Was it his experiences in the Navy? Was it his childhood and upbringing?

Specially Rob, but Holly could also put Forest Gump to shame.

Story was way too weak on intellect.

UDT Boy goes from semi-weekly beers with the Boss, to trusted second, and he doesn't know the boss has a new woman? We find out the wife is dead and no longer a threat? An ex-military boss springs succession ambush on UDT Boy without prior coordination? LOL. Too much, man. Too much.

There are a few plot-holes in this story, but the general idea behind the story - man offers suggestion and is roped in to help out by his boss -was a laugh a minute.

@Anon When the hero was bachelor he and his boss went to drink beer, when he became husband they stopped this habit. So the lack of the information for Tosha is understandable. This is not plot hole.

Naturally the majority of the men will not marry such pregnant girl as Holly was this Century. Kings from the mediavel or baroque ages did similar thing with their pregnant misstress and they looked for a newer misstress. This marriage was a friendly request for a temporary time.

The true plo hole however this, Who would pay the child support after divorce????

All is well when ends well...

5* but wish they would have had a child between them.

Sad in a way. If Rob is such a good guy, it'd be a pity if his genes didn't get passed on.

the truth and loyalty, TK U MLJ LV NV

Your story is not recognizableat at reality!! The man you describe is not for real!! Who will marry an unknown woman who is pregnant??? After all i had a good laughing!!!

Gave it a 5 because I want it to keep the HOT emblem. Creative plot. For most of human history marriages were arranged and had little to do with how the couple "felt" about each other. In this regard the plot is realistic. Well written and understandable.

Some elaboration would be nice:

1 How about a detailed heart to heart between Holly and Rob about the affair. Does she have feelings for Ron? Was it a one time event or an extended affair? Some intimate dialog between Rob and Holly early in their marriage would give us some inkling as to what the future portends. Rob seems to make a major life decision on very little "intel".

2 How about a background check on Holly. Is she a moral young woman who made a mistake or was seduced by an experienced womanizer or does she have a history of sleeping around and a loose sex lifestyle? This could determine the amount of energy Rob should expend the relationship and the timeline if and when he decides to bail out. I'd want to know.

3 There has to be a written pre-nuptial contract detailing Ron's financial obligations to his child both short and long term including DNA evidence that he is the biological father. Ron should be paying child support and incremental living expenses to Rob since Holly's income will disappear if she doesn't go back to work or be severely impacted due to child care costs. Rob should be made whole financially i.e. his living expenses should be no greater than if he continued to live alone. Holly should have no claim on his assets in the event of a divorce.

4 It is unrealistic that Rob allows this relationship to continue for 7 years without clarifying their feelings for each other. Realistically, within 2 years both of them would know whether this union is viable long term.

5 Enough with the SEALS. While I have the utmost respect for the military; compassion, self sacrifice and risk taking is common to all of us. No special training is required other than being a decent human being.

boy.

A Navy Seal with a soft side. Who would.have thought? Great story!

I worked with a guy who wore a baseball style cap with UDT on the front. All I thought about was that he was like Lloyd Bridges, the frogman on TV. Years later as Seal Team 6's exploits became known, I realized that I had been in the presence of a US Navy Seal all those years. He chuckled when I told him that it had finally sunk in. He said his career field was now known as Navy Seals.

The guy volunteers to be a cuckold for a friend, to marry a girl he never met and to take care of her and her baby without any compensation because he has a good heart?

Sure, it happens to us all. The whole premise of a plot is moronic but to make sense obviously the girl turns out to be an untold beauty. That was banged and knocked up by a 55-year-old guy? We don't hear what is the problem with our hero but it seems he is also impotent or infertile as he has not fathered a child of his own. Of course, apart from a beautiful woman the male characters are all Navy Seals (a standard LW cliche used by all the bad writers, it seems).

1 star from me.

Too many unanswered questions for more than 3 stars

As other said what about his kid s

Tired of navy seals as earlier green beret

Had to be trained to take over no mention

Logins forgetful. Johntwheels@aol

If that guy was a seal, then i endorse seal clubbing.

Me waiting for Dark2Dumbass2 to actually contribute something worthwhile to this site....ZZZZZzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz.

The sweetest deal story that I've ever read.

A lovely feel good story. But really short. what about an increase in the family? 5*s.

This is a very good story, and for a first time effort I think it’s a great story. What I’m amazed at is the vitriol in some of the comments on the story. Many comments said the story is just too far out of the realm of believability to be any good. Jeez, do they say that about Tolkien stories, or Star Trek, or Star Wars? Jiminy Frickin Cricket, people, it’s FICTION! It’s not supposed to be REAL! It’s a good thing this author has thick skin or he may not have posted any more stories here after reading some of the asinine comments about this story. And we would all be missing some great writing.

How come,they never had a child?.

It's a 5 for me BUT seven years??? I've gotta believe that after a year, two at most, someone would bring up the "what do we do now?" question. The thing that annoys me is "how could they be so in love and NOT have this conversation?". If they can't share to most inner most issue affecting their marriage, what kind of marriage is it?

To me it would still be a 5, if they were open with each other, agreed to making it a real permanent commitment and started a family of their own to show they are bound together forever. Then I could give it a 6!

Great storyline, well written, good character development.

Great story, made even better by being your first.

I really like most of your Stories .. But He listened to his boss on the phone talking to his wife .. Can anyone spell Divorce .

Raise your hand all who believe Ron never stopped tapping that ass.

Excellent, the naysayers did not read your intro. Take it for what it’s worth, a beautifully written story, showing sometimes a mans patience in gathering info can be rewarding.

Pure fantasy.

HUH, interesting story idea. well told

And they lived happily ever after. The company went on to be one of the largest around. Marie took over the reigns of the company and it went even further. It eventually became a Global powerhouse.

Holly and I gave Marie 2 brothers and a sister. The children did their own thing. They all joined the military and served our country. One in the Air Force one Army. My youngest daughter joined the Marines. She became a helicopter pilot.

Good story, but the half hearted attempts at misdirection are lame.

Dumb and even more poorly executed.

I don't doubt for a moment Rob was being cuckolded by the asshole and the slut continuously.

With his wimpiness, that's really the only thing that's gonna be happening in that kind of ridiculous marriage.

Just can't suspend my disbelief to even entertain the idea of the story as it's written.

Also, the title is absolute shit and has no relevance to the story.

Pure reader manipulation. Stilted and forced dialog in a weak attempt to maintain misdirection. Poorly executed at that.

Very pleasant. I guess he saw the lawyer to prepare for the divorce and learned that his name was on the birth certificate? It seems like the only way the ending makes sense.

It's a really good story, well written and entertaining and pleasant. I'd have loved to see him have a kid of his own as well, not just his boss's he adopted; but I guess that's a "me" problem :)

The first part if the first story was a tad transparent. He would marry her, of course, before he even told Rob the whole idea. I thought you'd deep six the story a few times, but you didn't. If you read other authors much, you can pick up that skill.

Very well done! Leap Year Guy is an Author and not just a story teller. That was brilliant, just brilliant! 5 BIG ASS, HUGE, FLAMING NOVA STARS!

Adequate, i suppose. Pretty stupid in some respects, though.

I very much liked this story. I was glad to see his 'noble' gesture turned into a beautiful one. A very well thought out and written story and I look forward to reading more of your work. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.

What a great story! Way to go!

Nice story well written. I enjoyed it very much.

I quite liked this story. A little angst, but a satisfying ending.

Good stuff!

This is a great story but should be in Romance. "Loving Wives" has always been ironically about wives who don't "love" their husbands or may in some sick and twisted way, but never real and never with trust, respect, and or honor. Just the empty way self-entitled narcissists love their possessions.

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Nice one. 5 stars for a happy ending.

Great story,a great ending the way it should be.

Very enjoyable, almost believable

We had argued some, like the time I forgot the toilet seat. She'd been so mad at me for that she only put one piece of cheese on my favorite sandwich. I was so pissed that I hardly said a word to her for the whole last 5 minutes of the Super bowl game, that had been about the worst fight we had ever had!

====> LOL! Cute story. But seriously how was he a Navy Seal? Still enjoyable. 5 stars for happy thoughts sappy ending. The other comment about not doing well in front of an audience was also hilarious.

Nice story, mostly well-told. (Way too many typos and some solecisms--that's why I say "mostly".) 5*.

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There's really one big, big logic hole, though. A surprise announcement for the company personnel about Rob's promotion might make sense--though we really need a little evidence that he's at a level where that makes sense. A public surprise announcement TO ROB makes no sense whatever! If nothing else, there would have to be a huge number of details he would need to be brought up to speed on! And telling Holly but not Rob? No way!

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Having said all that, I honestly find it a really good read, short but sweet.

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Except, why in Loving Wives? It really, REALLY doesn't belong there.

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(OK, I know hasn't posted anything since 2008, and almost certainly isn't following the comments on this story. Too bad. His stories are worth it.)