All Comments on 'Stuck with My Sister & No Clothes'

You should really proofread your work. LMAO

Proof read from the first chapter on it was like you threw random thoughts together and closed your eyes. Once you think you're done have someone else proof read it because none of us is so good we can see our own errors.

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When you write try to keep the blood in your brain; not your little head.

You have taken a good subject and made a hash of it.

No way would he pull out just shot his cum deep up inside her pussy

I dont see what the other commenters are talking about proofreading shit it seemed fine to me. If they meant the first part with the text then just goes to show how dumb they are

When you write 2 because you are too lazy to type out TWO that is wrong.

However when you use 11 to mean eleven that is acceptable but once again you probably should spell it out properly.

Remember that TEXT SHT is not really correct English for writing.

Go ahead and criticize me but you are the one that is trying to pass yourself off as a writer.

her waste? You like shit?

I know there's a name for that but I don't remember it right now.

Two for effort. Two. To. Too.

Zero through ten are spelled completely, 11 to infinity are Arabic.

Hope you add another chapter. Is his cock bigger than her husband? Need more!

This guy "rubbish" is a wanker of the highest order, if youve had a fixation about your sisters breasts all those years and she says cum on my tits, then you bloody well cum on her tits.

Now for these 2 & 11 tell em get a life and get phone slang too.

IGNORE THESE PETTY PRICKS

Brilliant story, well written too, my only bit is i couldnt ever lick my own cum up in a million years but each to their own, his fixation about her breasts makes it real enough.

Anyway congrats and drop us a line on your next write up please

Cheers 👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼

I can't wait to read more about their fun weekend

Couldn't get through the first paragraph.

Boring.

Titles a little... boring. First part is also less exciting, but that's expected. It was amazing, other than the sister's motivation for him to fuck her. Like just cuz shes horny doesnt make 100% sense cuz if i was horny i wouldnt fuck a relative. Otherwise pretty cool man

Why don't all you English critics go jump in front of a moving train! You want perfection in your reading material then go buy a NY Times best seller and pay your $25 - $50 for it. THIS is "Free" erotica written by non-professionals for Your Free enjoyment, but you probably can't appreciate that because all you care about is making sure that you are heard as the high and mighty English Teacher - AND most of you haven't even had the guts to submit your own stories to Literotica. Do something useful and go be a real 5th grade English teacher, maybe They will appreciate your 'knowledge' of the English language! We are tired of hearing/reading your B.S.

Great story, bounced on my boy's dick to this for hours. Anyways, just wanted to congratulate you on your great usage of middle-school aged girls to fantasize about in the beginning of your story. Really got my rocks off to that one. Alright! Big money tibbo over and out bitch 8=====> - - - --- -.....

That guy had no self esteem. If I were him and my sister said I’m horny, fuck meander the circumstances of this story, I would have told her you are married and you want to fuck me because you’re horny? And I wasn’t your first choice, your girl friends were. I would have said fuck you and walk out.When I got to the first floor, I would paid a couple of guys to go to her room and ask to fuck her. She just wanted him to be her ignorant love toy. I would fuck my sister but not under those circumstances.

Someone else has said about just throwing everything together. And just fucking your sister because you have just been massaged, if I hadn’t read this I don’t suppose I would have thought about it. Even Maui wasn’t needed,it was just chucked into the mix. To think that his sister is married to a high profile banker,but she seems to have no education. I suppose she gets by, just calling him “ babe?”

good short story got me revved up and wanting more to this story I felt the ending was kinda short but ultimately it's a good story I honestly can't understand the negative comments as if anyone comes to this site and is worrying about exact grammar they clearly have problems if I could give any constructive criticism it would be that the sister character needs more fleshing out

Really enjoyed the story, but his lack of clothes seemed to have little relevance to the events. Maybe if the story had continued and his clothes hadn't been found, it would mean more. Only a minor criticism because, as I said, I enjoyed it.

Some endings need to be left to the imagination and this was one of them. Kudos.

Good while it lasted...****.