All Comments on 'Substitute Family'

Fantastic story, loved it from the start. you certainly know how to keep me on the edge of my seat. I wonder if they will have babies now they are married.

It's got that tiny touch of class to it that I've been missing from literotica lately.

Your writing is superb! No mis-spelling, no punctuation errors, very thorough and HOT! We do need a sequel however.........!!

one of the best!! i have read here in many years continue please

This is probably one of, if not the best stories I have read. I am at a loss for words to pen praise worthy to be posted here. My heart has been moved.

...if it wasn’t for him cheating on his wife.

'I've been out for a run, I'm all sweaty. I was just going to take a shower,'

So when he was filthy he takes a bath?

what a clusterfuck of a 'story'

I have very little to say ... except You are an AMAZING writer

I loved the story although it got a bit confusing at times with the change from first to third person description.

Fantastic stories. I look forward to reading more of your stories. Thanks for sharing!

Your stories are amazing. Please don’t stop!

Very annoying.

Its good that the main character is happy but he is totally cheating on his wife with two different women. I know he finds a way to justify it but that's not great.

I love your style of writing as the sex bits are completely engaging but not central to the storyline, and the story is the focal point.. well done.

Good story but I agree he is cheating on his wife.

A great story. Loved it .AAAAA+++++

Could have been a sweet story if he wasn’t such a man-whore. Not a quality human being, and he doesn’t deserve his wife. Mary is just as low quality, so I guess he really is her son. High marks for quality writing, but 2 demerits for the vile characters…

Not as good as other submissions, real reasons I will keep to myself.

The only question I have, is why is ass to fanny, fanny to ass so prevalent in most of your submissions? It makes one, especially me, cringe and clouds the enjoyment of reading excellent and above par stories.

Not crazy about him having sex behind Kerry’s back. Shows an utter lack of respect. I loved the story otherwise. I just hate the cheating.

I really liked this, but as other commenters have stated, switching between first=person and third-person can be confusing...still 5/5!!

Great story! Love your writing style. Most other authors I've read write a story about sex, around the sex. You, however, write a beautiful, well thought out, well planned story and spice it up with the sex. Jerk material is sometimes really good, but this is soooo much better! REALLY enjoy reading your stories. And again, 5⭐ just doesn't seem to be enough. Rafe

Love it. if you ever want to add to this story about the babies they make together please do.